Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · IELTS Summit Mastery · 2026-09-27

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The table below shows the change in some household types in Great Britain from 1971 to 2007.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

PEOPLE IN HOUSEHOLDS BY TYPE OF HOUSEHOLD AND FAMILY

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The diagram illustrates the change in Great Britian household type throghout the year 1971 to 2007.

One person percentage has been slighlitely peak up the mountains over the years across all the years while in final two years it remains the same.

Now, comes the part of the One-family household in this section the couples with no children percentage keeps on adding the members percentage till the year 1991, also in [redacted phone] the percentage remains the same. Nevertheless, the one with the dependent children keep going on decreasing over the year, it touch the mountains at the year 1971 and come into the ground until the year 2007.

As well as, the one with the Non-dependent children remails fulcutate it's neither the most up nor the most down at it peak the highest at the year 1991 and low at the year 2007. Also, there were a Lone parent section as well this keeps on increasing over the time where the least at first year and remains same at last 2 years.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

The student attempts to summarise the main features of the chart, noting trends such as the increase in one-person and lone-parent households, and the decrease in couples with dependent children. However, the response falls short of fully presenting a comprehensive overview. The data citation is imprecise and relies on highly informal, metaphorical phrasing (e.g., 'peak up the mountains', 'come into the ground') rather than accurate statistical reporting. There is no clear, distinct overview paragraph summarising the overall trends. Consequently, the task achievement is limited by insufficient selection of data and lack of clear academic reporting, corresponding to a band 4.5 or 5.0.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The essay is divided into short paragraphs, but the overall organisation lacks a clear logical progression. Cohesive devices are used awkwardly or inaccurately (e.g., 'Now, comes the part of...', 'As well as, the one with...'), creating a disjointed flow for the reader. Referencing is frequently unclear, making it difficult to track which category or year is being discussed. While there is some attempt to group information logically by household type, the lack of appropriate mechanical cohesion and structural signposting results in a weak organizational framework, warranting a band 5.0.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.0

The vocabulary is very basic, repetitive, and heavily relies on informal or inappropriate expressions such as 'peak up the mountains', 'keep on adding', and 'come into the ground'. There are numerous non-standard lexical choices and spelling errors (e.g., 'Britian', 'slighlitely', 'fulcutate' for fluctuate). The student fails to demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary suitable for describing statistical data, leading to frequent strain for the reader and inaccurate word choices throughout the text, placing it at a band 4.0.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.0

Grammatical control is weak throughout the response. The range of sentence structures is very limited, and attempts at complex or compound sentences often result in severe structural errors and awkward fragments (e.g., 'Also, there were a Lone parent section as well this keeps on increasing over the time where the least at first year and remains same at last 2 years.'). Verb tense consistency is frequently violated, and basic agreement errors are widespread. These frequent and systematic grammatical errors impede communication and place the response firmly at a band 4.0.

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