Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.5 · IELTS Summit Mastery · 2026-09-28
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The table below shows the change in some household types in Great Britain from 1971 to 2007.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
PEOPLE IN HOUSEHOLDS BY TYPE OF HOUSEHOLD AND FAMILY
Student answer (Band 4.5)
To begin with, from 1971 to 2007, every decade shows a major change in household and type of family in every household; for instance, if one talks about the loner it gradually increased as every decade passed because of the ltest technology and also the enhancement in the workload which leads to mental health issues due to which people prefer not to make a family. Moreover, there's data given for children inwhich there are three types are given first is the couples who prefer not to have children at all that significatly increased as every decade passed then there are dependent and independent children.First let's talk about dependent children which decreased with the passage of time because children are slowly learning to be financially free witgh the passage of time.secondly, the non dependent children are almost same no significant change and at the end the lone parents percentage increased.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5
The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 150 words, coming in at 149 words. While the writer attempts to discuss several categories from the table such as one-person households, couples without children, and lone parents, the selection of data is erratic and lacks a clear, overall summary or overview of the main trends. Furthermore, the candidate includes external, speculative commentary not present in the visual data—such as attributing trends to 'the ltest technology' and 'mental health issues due to which people prefer not to make a family'—which detracts from objective data reporting. Task achievement is thus significantly limited.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0
The response is written as a single, overly long paragraph that lacks logical division. Cohesion is very weak and mechanical, relying on repetitive transitional phrases like 'with the passage of time' and 'as every decade passed' within the same sentence. There is a lack of clear progression of ideas, and referencing is confusing, with run-on sentences making it difficult to follow the relationships between different data points.
Lexical Resource: Band 4.5
The vocabulary used is basic and repetitive, with several spelling and word-choice errors, such as 'loner' instead of 'one-person households', 'ltest', 'inwhich', and 'witgh'. While there are attempts to use vocabulary related to data trends ('gradually increased', 'significantly increased'), the range is very limited, and informal or inaccurate expressions ('prefer not to make a family', 'almost same') restrict the score to the lower bands.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.0
The text suffers from major structural issues, primarily consisting of extremely long run-on sentences connected by comma splices and conjunctions, such as '...if one talks about the loner it gradually increased as every decade passed because of...'. Grammatical and punctuation control is poor throughout, with frequent errors in basic sentence construction, missing capitalisation, and typos that hinder readability.
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