Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · IELTS Summit Mastery · 2026-09-29

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The table below shows the change in some household types in Great Britain from 1971 to 2007.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

PEOPLE IN HOUSEHOLDS BY TYPE OF HOUSEHOLD AND FAMILY

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The bottom table gives the difference in some household types in Great Britan.

overall,one person,no children and lone parent are eventualy increasing from 1971 to 2001 hand hold it till 2007. Dependent childrend portions shows flactuation and non-dependent children giver the downdword rate till 2007.Most of the category doesnot shows huge chnages except dependent childern starting at 52% ending with 36%.

dependent children takes the top rate in 1971 round at 52% and Lone parent takes the bottom portion at 4%.non-dendent child hold the 10% rate till 1981 round at 10% and falls in 2001 at 9% and stady.

The only one category which is dependent children was dicreasing which started with 52% and ended at 36% in 2007.the one person and lone parent got the same portions in 2007 at 12%.

In the ending year dependent children again hold the higher portion and this time non-dependent chilkdren is at the last at 9%

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

The student attempts to cover the main trends in the table, identifying that 'dependent children' decreased significantly from 52% to 36% while 'one person' and 'lone parent' households increased. However, the response contains several inaccuracies and omissions in reporting data. For example, the statement that 'non-dependent children giver the downdword rate till 2007' is misleading, as this category remained relatively stable at 10% then 9%. Furthermore, the overview is poorly structured, and the selection of data points lacks clarity. While the main features are touched upon, the lack of precision and underdeveloped comparisons mean the task is only partially addressed, fitting the Band 5 descriptor.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

The text is divided into short, disjointed paragraphs that fail to establish a clear logical progression. Cohesive devices are either missing or misused, such as 'hand hold it' and 'In the ending year'. Referencing is frequently unclear, and sentences often feel like isolated bullet points rather than a cohesive summary. Paragraphing is haphazard, with single sentences acting as separate paragraphs. There is no clear overall progression from an introduction to body paragraphs and a well-synthesised conclusion. These issues align the response closely with Band 4.0, as information and ideas are not arranged in a coherent manner.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

The vocabulary used is basic and repetitive, featuring numerous spelling errors ('Great Britan', 'eventay', 'flactuation', 'downdword', 'doesnot', 'childern', 'dicreasing', 'stady', 'chilkdren'). The student attempts some less common vocabulary such as 'fluctuation' and 'portion', but errors in word choice and spelling impede communication in places. Phrases like 'takes the top rate' and 'hold the higher portion' are unnatural collocations. The lexical range is limited and barely adequate for the task, reflecting a Band 4.5 performance, rounded to 4.5 or 5.0 based on standard descriptors.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.0

Grammatical control is weak throughout the response. There is a very limited range of sentence structures, and attempts at complex sentences are frequently faulty or incomplete. Numerous basic errors in subject-verb agreement, tense usage, and punctuation are present (e.g., 'Most of the category doesnot shows huge chnages', 'dependent children takes the top rate'). Punctuation and capitalisation are erratic, with multiple run-on clauses and missing capital letters at the start of sentences. The frequency of errors causes persistent difficulty for the reader, placing this response firmly in Band 4.0.

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