Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · IELTS Summit Mastery · 2026-10-09

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The table below shows the change in some household types in Great Britain from 1971 to 2007.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

PEOPLE IN HOUSEHOLDS BY TYPE OF HOUSEHOLD AND FAMILY

Student answer (Band 4.5)

In this graph we seenl the information about the households and family from 1971 to 2007 by which their are many changes seen is this graph.

However, households of one person carry in 1971 is 6 percet but later on in 1981 till 2007 it is increasing rapidly for example in 1981 it is increase to 8 also in 1991 it increases to 11 however,in 2001 till 2007 it remains same as 12

Furthermore, if we talk about family so their are lot of families and couples but if we look in to the children their are 19 percent in 1971 while in many year it was increasing but from 2001 till 2007 it is remain same to 25 percent.

Moreover,if we talk about dependent children and non dependent children it was decreasing . As well as, in the loan percent it was increasing yearly while in 1971 it was 4 percent but in 1981 it reaches to 6 percent while it was increaseing till 2008.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

You identify several relevant movements, including the rise in one-person households from 6% to 12% and the increase in couples without children to 25%. However, the response gives only a partial account of the table and lacks a clear overview of its main pattern. The statement that dependent and non-dependent children were both decreasing is too broad: dependent-child households fell from 52% to 36%, while non-dependent households fluctuated and ended at 9%. The discussion of “children” also mislabels the figures of 19% to 25%, which refer to couples with no children. Finally, the lone-parent figure is incorrectly said to increase until 2008; the table ends in 2007, at 12%. Select the largest changes and report categories and dates precisely.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

The response has some basic organisation: it moves from one-person households to couples and then to households with children and lone parents. Linking expressions such as “Furthermore” and “Moreover” show an attempt to connect points. However, the progression is difficult to follow because there is no distinct overview, and several ideas are combined in long, unclear sentences. For example, “if we talk about family so their are lot of families and couples” does not establish which category is being discussed. The repeated “if we talk about” pattern and frequent use of “however” also make cohesion mechanical. Group the main trends into clear paragraphs and use precise references to each household type so readers can follow comparisons.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You use a small set of task-related terms, including “households,” “dependent children,” “increasing,” and “decreasing,” so the general subject is recognisable. However, vocabulary is basic and repetitive, and several choices make the data difficult to interpret. “Carry” does not naturally describe a percentage trend, while “loan percent” appears to mean “lone parent.” The phrase “the children” is also too vague for distinguishing the table’s categories, and “increasing rapidly” overstates a gradual rise. Spelling errors such as “percet” and “increaseing” further reduce clarity. Build a more precise range of trend and category language, and check spelling and collocations before submitting.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

There are attempts to form longer sentences and use time clauses, but control is weak and errors frequently make relationships between ideas unclear. Examples include “we seenl the information,” “their are many changes seen,” and “it is remain same,” which show problems with verb forms, agreement, and sentence construction. The sentence beginning “Furthermore, if we talk about family” also lacks a clear grammatical structure, while punctuation is inconsistent, particularly around commas and conjunctions. Most sentences rely on simple patterns or loosely joined clauses, with little accurate variety. Practise writing short, complete sentences first, then combine related comparisons using controlled clauses and consistent past-tense reporting.

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