Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · IELTS Summit Mastery · 2026-10-30

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The table below shows the change in some household types in Great Britain from 1971 to 2007.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

PEOPLE IN HOUSEHOLDS BY TYPE OF HOUSEHOLD AND FAMILY

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The diagram below illustrate that the improvments in some household kinds in great britain from 1971 to 2007.

Overall, one person in household made the 12%. While on other side one family household on children dependent is at 36%.

To commence with, single person in 1971 can make 6% while the same in 2007 is 12%. But the kin household has a benefit due to many ways. family household with no child is at 25%. It is observed that percentages in 1971 is more as compared to 2007.

On the other hand, the relatives household with fully on children is at 36% in contrast to non dependent on infants is just at 9%. Now at lone pair who do not have any long members with them like lone parents is not making any progress due to low 12%. To improve this big members of family required to increase the percentages.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

You identify several relevant categories and include some accurate figures, such as the rise in one-person households from 6% to 12% and the 2007 figures of 36% for couples with dependent children and 9% for those with non-dependent children. However, the overview is unclear and does not summarise the main pattern across the period. The statement that one-family households with dependent children “is at 36%” gives only the final value, while the claim that percentages in 1971 were higher than in 2007 is inaccurate for categories such as one-person households, couples without children and lone parents. The response also introduces unsupported advice about increasing family size. To improve, compare the main rises and falls accurately and keep the report focused on describing the table.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

There is an attempt to organise the response with an opening, an overview and body paragraphs, and phrases such as “To commence with” and “On the other hand” signal movement between points. However, the progression is difficult to follow because the categories are not presented in a clear sequence, and some links do not express a meaningful contrast. For example, “On the other hand” introduces another household category without a clear comparison, while “But the kin household has a benefit” is hard to connect to the preceding figures. The final sentences shift to advice rather than continuing the data summary. Group the categories by rising, falling or stable trends, and use linking phrases only when the relationship between ideas is clear.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

The response uses a few relevant terms, including “dependent children,” “non dependent” and “lone parents,” showing some awareness of the table’s subject. However, vocabulary is often inaccurate or unnatural, which makes several points difficult to interpret. Phrases such as “household kinds,” “kin household,” “fully on children” and “lone pair” do not clearly name the categories. “Improvments” is also misspelled, and “benefit” is not suitable for describing a percentage trend. Use the table’s exact category labels and standard reporting language, such as “the proportion of households,” “increased,” “declined” and “remained stable.” This would make the description clearer and more appropriate to an academic report.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt a range of sentence forms, including a contrast with “while” and a comparison using “as compared to,” and the main figures can generally be identified. However, errors in sentence structure, agreement and articles are frequent. For example, “The diagram below illustrate” has incorrect subject–verb agreement, and “one person in household made the 12%” does not form a clear grammatical description. The sentence beginning “Now at lone pair” is also incomplete, and “percentages in 1971 is” has a plural subject with a singular verb. Practise complete sentences with a clear subject and verb, and use consistent past-tense reporting for changes over time. More accurate basic structures will help your comparisons communicate reliably.

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