Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · IELTS Summit Mastery · 2026-11-09

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Tourism is one of the fastest growing industries and contributes a great deal to economies around the world. However, the damage tourism can cause to local cultures and the environment is often ignored.

To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

In modern society, tourism is contributing a large amount of deals and increasing industries all over the world. On the other hand, it is often creating a damage to tourism to local culture and enviornment. I partially agree with this statement as it is also creating business and employement to many tourist companies , and also creating a cause to environment , local cultures.

To begin with, Tourism is contributing a huge amount of business to many companies. The increasing amount of tourism creates a lot of opportunities of growing industruies to create a huge revenue to company . In addition , it also creates many job opportunities to individuals so they can also generate money from it. For instance, Dubai is a famous place tourism and every year it creates many job opportunities in tourism industry.

On the other hand, tourism also has a vital cause to environment. it makes a huge damage to nature as by growing number of tourismas many trees and nature is harmed . however, it also significant imapct on local tribe culture. Due to local number of tourist travelling to tribes make them feel weird to share their culture and they often stop continueing their local folks and tribal culture in fear of shame. For example, many countries heve stop tribal culture because of getting disrespected globally in social media.

In conclusion, I partially agree with both reasons as tourism is also creating a huge profit to growing industries and also creating many job opportunities. But, it also creating damage to local culture and enviornemnt.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You address both sides of the issue by discussing tourism’s economic benefits and its effects on the environment and local cultures, and your conclusion repeats a partly balanced position. However, the extent of your agreement is not fully clear: “I partially agree with this statement” is followed by reasons that are not weighed against each other, and the conclusion says you agree “with both reasons,” which does not precisely answer whether the damage is often ignored. The Dubai example supports employment, but the claims about environmental harm and tribes are broad and need a specific, explained example. Develop the central argument by clarifying what you agree with and showing how tourism causes harm or how that harm is overlooked.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a recognisable overall structure: an introduction, separate paragraphs for economic benefits and negative effects, and a conclusion. This makes the main topics easy to identify. You also use signposts such as “To begin with,” “On the other hand,” and “In conclusion.” However, progression within paragraphs is sometimes unclear, and some links feel mechanical or do not express the relationship accurately. For example, “however” introduces the cultural impact without clearly connecting it to the environmental point, while the conclusion repeats the introduction rather than drawing the two arguments together. Use clearer topic sentences and connect each example directly to the claim it supports; ensure pronouns and references make the intended idea clear.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some relevant topic vocabulary, including “job opportunities,” “revenue,” “environment,” and “local culture,” so the reader can follow the general subject. However, the range is limited and several word choices or collocations are inaccurate, sometimes making meaning difficult to interpret. Phrases such as “a large amount of deals,” “a vital cause to environment,” and “a famous place tourism” do not express the intended ideas naturally. Spelling errors, including “enviornment,” “employement,” and “industruies,” also reduce accuracy. Build a bank of accurate tourism-related collocations and check spelling and word forms; for example, distinguish between tourism generating income and tourism causing damage.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more extended sentence forms, including a reason clause beginning “Due to” and a sentence explaining that tourists “make them feel weird.” However, control is inconsistent, and errors in sentence structure, articles, agreement, and verb forms sometimes make the reader work to understand the point. For example, “it also creating damage” lacks a finite verb, while “many trees and nature is harmed” has an agreement problem. The sentence beginning “Due to local number of tourist travelling to tribes” is also difficult to parse. Practise building complete sentences with a clear subject and verb, and check articles, plural forms, and agreement before submitting.

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