Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · IELTS Summit Mastery · 2026-11-10

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Tourism is one of the fastest growing industries and contributes a great deal to economies around the world. However, the damage tourism can cause to local cultures and the environment is often ignored.

To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

It is often argued that tourism is one of the fastest increasing industries and contributes a great deal to economics around the world. But, the damage tourism can problem to local cultures and the surrounding is often ignored. I completely agree with this statement because this damage the places. On the one hand, the main reason is that because when other of country people will coming in their country, then your country will very benefits in their country economies is grow. for example, When another country people will coming in their country then in his money spent other things and your country citizens everyone benefits . while there are tourist coming then there old history building and other old places looked very happy or most of time takephotos because his old memories. On the other hand, the main reason is that because sometime most op tourists are arrived in his country , Then, they are produce in problem for local people because when they eating some food then waste material throw the spot. So the damage coulture and the environment and many dieases active .therefor , The goverment dhould provide well facilities local people . In conclusion I strongly

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

You take a clear position with “I completely agree,” and you mention both economic benefits and harm to local people, culture, and the environment. However, the response only addresses the question minimally: the economic point is not clearly connected to whether damage is ignored, and the environmental example is brief and unclear. The claim that tourists leave food waste is relevant, but it needs explanation or a specific example to show the scale or consequences of the damage. The conclusion is unfinished (“In conclusion I strongly”), so your final view is not fully restated. The response also contains 199 words, below the required 250. Develop two relevant reasons with clear supporting examples and complete the conclusion.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

There is an attempt to organise the response using “On the one hand,” “On the other hand,” and “In conclusion,” which gives the reader some indication of the intended structure. However, the ideas do not progress clearly: the first body section shifts between economic benefits, old buildings, and tourists taking photos without explaining how these points relate. Several linking expressions are repetitive or awkward, such as “the main reason is that because,” and the conclusion stops before completing the argument. Paragraphing and clearer topic sentences would help distinguish your reasons. Arrange each paragraph around one main idea, then explain it and give a relevant example; use linking words only where they show a clear relationship.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You use some relevant topic vocabulary, including “tourism,” “local people,” “environment,” “economies,” and “old history building,” so the general subject is recognisable. However, the range is basic and repetitive, and several inaccurate word choices make meaning difficult to follow. For example, “damage tourism can problem” does not express the intended idea, while “many dieases active” is unclear. Spelling and word forms such as “coulture,” “goverment,” and “benefits” also reduce clarity. Build a small set of accurate phrases for discussing tourism’s effects, such as “put pressure on local services” and “damage cultural heritage,” and check spelling and collocations before finishing.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You attempt to express cause and contrast, for example with “because when” and “while,” but sentence structures are very limited and frequent errors often make the meaning hard to understand. Verb forms and agreement are problematic in phrases such as “people will coming” and “economies is grow”; articles and possessives are also unclear in “in his country” and “their country.” Some sentences run together without reliable punctuation, particularly the long example beginning “When another country people…”. Practise building accurate simple sentences first, then combine them using one clear subordinate clause. Check subject–verb agreement, verb forms after “will,” and sentence boundaries, and make sure every sentence has a complete main clause.

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