Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · IELTS Summit Mastery · 2026-11-10

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Tourism is one of the fastest growing industries and contributes a great deal to economies around the world. However, the damage tourism can cause to local cultures and the environment is often ignored.

To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

Trourism is rapidly soar to all over the world and it is also supports countries economically. I also belive that it supports a nation in both way economically and represents culture to all over the world. Some individuals might think it damage to local cultures and environment but I do not think it really harm the environment as all.

That countries are God gifted country whos have very beautiful Sea, Mountains, Waterfall and many more natural resources. The authority can not make this kind of things with money or whatever they had. People are eger to visit these by spending money. When people get chance to make a tour they do not think about the money, they plan and make it happen by travelling these places. The Government can make a lot of money by this touris places.

It also helps country to make good relationship with other countries. By travelling from one and another country they both country can build strong bonding between them. When a tourist comes from another country it really attracts others to visit their country to as a result they also visit their country. The trade between those two country happens more and more because of that. We can see right now how a trourist country growing super fast and making their economy more strong.

That could be happend that is trousim could be harm local culture but the Government also aware of this which can be saved by them. They also try to keep environment safe and clean because of the people from out side of the world.

Trousim makes a country more strong by helping them many ways, but it is very nominal as compare to cause local and environment because the authority have more ability to fix these concern and makes more ecofriendly tourist country.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You give a recognisable position: tourism benefits economies and relationships between countries, and you consider the possibility of harm to culture and the environment. However, the response only partly addresses the question because it does not clearly assess how much you agree with the claim that tourism’s damage is ignored. Your assertion that harm is “very nominal” is not explained, and the claim that governments can fix the concerns is unsupported. The economic points are relevant, but examples such as “a tourist country growing super fast” remain general rather than showing a specific effect. To develop the response, state your degree of agreement clearly and support each main reason with a concrete example, including how tourism can affect local traditions or natural sites.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The response has separate paragraphs for natural attractions, international relationships, possible harm, and a conclusion, so there is some organisation and the reader can identify the main topics. However, the overall progression is not consistently clear: the first paragraph introduces several claims, while the final paragraph shifts to saying the harm is “very nominal” without having established this comparison. Connections between ideas are sometimes unclear, as in the sentence about visitors attracting others and then increasing trade. Linking phrases such as “It also” and “That could be” are used, but they do not always show the precise relationship between points. Give each body paragraph one clear central idea, develop it in sequence, and use explicit transitions to connect evidence to your position.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some relevant topic vocabulary, including “economically,” “natural resources,” “relationship,” “trade,” and “environment,” which helps communicate the general subject. However, the range is limited and several inaccurate or repeated expressions make parts difficult to understand. Examples include “Trourism,” “trourist,” and “Trousim,” as well as “God gifted country” and “make a tour.” Some combinations are not natural in this context, such as “strong bonding” and “touris places.” Aim to use a smaller set of accurate, natural phrases rather than repeating or misspelling key terms. Learning collocations such as “tourism revenue,” “local traditions,” and “environmental damage” would make your ideas clearer and more appropriate for an academic essay.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and longer sentences, including a conditional idea in “When people get chance to make a tour…” and a relative clause in “which can be saved by them.” However, the range is limited, and errors are frequent enough to make some sentences difficult to follow. For example, “it is also supports” has an incorrect verb pattern, while “That countries are God gifted country whos have…” contains problems with agreement and clause structure. Other examples include “they both country can build” and “the authority have.” Practise building accurate subject–verb patterns, articles, plurals, and complete clauses before adding complexity. Clearer sentence boundaries and careful proofreading would also help readers follow your reasoning.

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