Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · IELTS Summit Mastery · 2026-11-11

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Tourism is one of the fastest growing industries and contributes a great deal to economies around the world. However, the damage tourism can cause to local cultures and the environment is often ignored.

To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

Tourism is the backbone of a country. In yester years, due to less advancement in transporting industries, Individuals were not able to travel at far distance, whereas nowadays, with the overall advancement in all sectors there is huge benefit in travelling sector with which a masses can travel at far distance with no probelm. I agree with this stance that even though trousim is fast growing industries and contributes great deal to economics around the world but the damaged caused by tourism is often ignored

The major reason why eventhough tourism contributes to great deal economics around the world however the damage caused by is often ignored firstly. Pollution, while visting ones country do not give their proper consedriation regarding cleaness which is why some travellers throw garbage outside the dustbins more pollution is caused. Hurting sentiments, sometimes travelers mistakenly hurt the sentiment of a culture and tradition which is why they put a great harm in one's society

As"beauty lies in the eyes of beholder" similarly commuintators opine the stament saying tourism is fast growing industries and contributes a great deal to economics around the world is. Gdp, for explanation. For some countries tourism is the support or the backbone for running theri country because countries like Bali,Indonesia,Dubai all relyea on trousim beacause it provides boost to theri economy

Hammering on the last nail it can be concluded that although tourists some times disrupts the local cultures and harm enironment but some countries gdp only rises due tp tourism

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You take a position that tourism brings economic benefits but can harm the environment and local culture, and you give relevant examples such as littering and countries that rely on tourism. However, the discussion is only partial: the environmental and cultural harms are briefly asserted, while the economic point is not clearly connected to your overall judgement. The phrase “I agree with this stance” does not specify the extent of your agreement, and the conclusion repeats the contrast rather than resolving it. The response is also 242 words, eight words below the required minimum; eight words copied from the task prompt were not counted. Develop each main point with a clear explanation or specific example, and state your degree of agreement consistently.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

There is a basic essay shape, with an introduction, two body paragraphs and a conclusion, and the reader can identify the main themes of harm and economic benefit. However, progression between ideas is difficult to follow. The first body paragraph begins with a confusing sentence (“The major reason why… however… firstly”), and the next paragraph opens with a proverb and an unclear reference to “commuintators,” rather than making a direct transition to the economic argument. Linking expressions such as “which is why” and “because” are repeated, while some references are unclear. Use one clear topic sentence per paragraph, arrange supporting details in a logical order, and use simpler, more precise transitions.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You attempt topic-related vocabulary, including “pollution,” “sentiments,” “culture and tradition,” “GDP,” and “backbone,” so the reader can recognise the subject and your main ideas. However, the range is limited and several word choices, collocations and spelling errors make parts difficult to understand. Examples include “a masses,” “at far distance,” “proper consedriation,” and “countries like Bali… relyea on trousim.” Some expressions, such as “Hammering on the last nail,” are not used naturally in this context. Aim for accurate, natural phrases and check spelling carefully. More precise terms such as “local communities,” “environmental damage,” and “depend on tourism revenue” would help express your points clearly.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and longer sentences, including a contrast between past and present travel and a concluding sentence beginning “although.” However, complex sentences are often faulty, and frequent errors can make the reader work to understand the meaning. For example, “I agree with this stance that even though…” combines structures without a clear grammatical relationship, while “the damage caused by is often ignored” is incomplete. There are also problems with agreement and sentence boundaries, as in “tourists some times disrupts” and the long opening sentence joined by “whereas.” Practise building shorter, complete sentences first, then add subordinate clauses with clear subjects and verbs. Check agreement, articles, and punctuation during revision.

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