Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · IELTS Summit Mastery · 2026-11-11

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Tourism is one of the fastest growing industries and contributes a great deal to economies around the world. However, the damage tourism can cause to local cultures and the environment is often ignored.

To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

Worldwide, tourism industry has drastically rise the economy of every country. Tourism industries are the most popular among fastest growing industries which play a significant role in country's economy, while the destruction caused by tourists to environment and local cultures is often neglected. I completely disagree with this statement that the damage which is caused by tourism is often ignored because the authorities are working a lot on their infrastructures and local cultures by the help of revenue that is generated by the tourism.

The counties which are welcoming the immigrants are always the one which are great in economies and are first world countries. Although several cases have arises in which a damage has been done by the outsiders, they are equally spending their currency on the country which they have visited. The authorities are getting a huge investments of money by the tourism industry in the form of tariff; taxes are being payed by tourists from buying tickets to visiting the countries by spending in the living expenses. For instance, local cultures are getting destroyed by the tourism; at the same time a huge number of citizens are earning well only by the tourism.

One more significant point which I have to raise is that a lot of countries get a high level of recognition on global level only by the tourism. If tourists are coming in the country and are promoting that country's culture, they will get an appreciation and recognition by their unique culture which other people are not aware of. Moreover, the environmental damage is not the issue to focus about, there are certain ways by which a damage can be stopped; bins should be placed everywhere to put garbage and a fine should be introduced if anyone neglect the rules and regulations. Economically it is easier for the country to spend more on their structural betterment of local conditions so that they attract more outsiders by that.

In conclusion, damage to the cultures and environment can only be neglected by the authorities if they are not charging for breaking rules, otherwise tourism is beneficial in every ways for the country and to its local citizens.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

Your position is stated clearly: you “completely disagree” that tourism-related damage is often ignored, and you give relevant points about tourism revenue, employment, cultural recognition, and possible environmental rules. However, the response only partly answers the central issue. Much of the support explains tourism’s economic benefits rather than showing that damage is not ignored or how authorities address harm to cultures and the environment. The claim that authorities invest in “structural betterment” is not illustrated with a specific example, and the proposed bins and fines are suggestions rather than evidence that damage is currently being managed. Develop the argument by directly weighing the scale of harm against concrete measures already taken, and clarify your position on both cultural and environmental damage.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The essay has a recognisable structure, with an introduction, two body paragraphs and a conclusion, and signposts such as “One more significant point” help indicate a new idea. Nevertheless, progression within the paragraphs is sometimes unclear: the first body paragraph moves from immigration to tourism revenue, cultural destruction and citizens’ earnings without explaining the links between these points. The conclusion introduces a condition about authorities charging for rule-breaking that has not been established clearly in the body. Some linking phrases, including “at the same time” and “Moreover,” connect sentences mechanically rather than showing the precise relationship between ideas. Group each paragraph around one main claim, then explain and support it before moving to the next point.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use a range of topic-related vocabulary, including “revenue,” “recognition,” “local cultures,” and “rules and regulations,” which makes the subject clear. There are also noticeable problems with word choice, collocation and word forms that sometimes make the meaning awkward, such as “drastically rise the economy,” “a huge investments,” and “structural betterment.” “Immigrants” is also not the right term for visitors who travel temporarily; “tourists” or “visitors” would be more accurate. Repeated use of “damage,” “tourism,” and “country” limits precision. Build a more reliable set of collocations for discussing economic benefits and environmental or cultural impacts, and check that each word fits the intended meaning.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You attempt both simple and complex sentence forms, including clauses beginning with “Although” and “if,” and the overall meaning is generally understandable. However, errors recur in verb forms, agreement, articles and sentence construction. For example, “tourism industry has drastically rise” needs a correctly formed verb, while “The counties … are always the one which are” contains agreement problems. In “a huge investments,” the article and plural noun do not agree, and “if anyone neglect the rules” needs a matching verb form. Some long sentences also combine several ideas without clear grammatical control. Practise checking subject–verb agreement, singular and plural forms, and verb forms after auxiliaries and conditional clauses; then proofread each sentence for a clear main clause.

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