Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · IELTS Summit Mastery · 2026-11-11

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Tourism is one of the fastest growing industries and contributes a great deal to economies around the world. However, the damage tourism can cause to local cultures and the environment is often ignored.

To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The tourism industry is one of the fastest growing industries in the world and it heavily contibutes to the economies around the world. On the other hand, the local culture and the environmental damage caused by tourism is overlooked. I believe that tourism is beneficial and it helps in an economy to grow. It also allows people to visit different places, cultures and eat different cuisines and food. It also provides opportunity to integrate in a society of different people. Thus, I do not fully agree with the given statement.

Tourism brings people together from all parts of the world. One beauty of tourism is that it can be both local and international. Local tourism is when people of the same country visit different cities and places of their home country and international tourism is when you visit another country and explore its culture, food, places and people. Both are equally important as they bring people of all walks of life, with different ethnicities, cultures, languages and religions together. Many tourists try to integrate with the locals. Recently, I saw a video in which a foreigner was dancing on the folk beats of Punjab, Pakistan. Everyone was delighted to see him, joined him and they all enjoyed the rich folk music. This type of integration is important for healthy relations with people across the borders.

Moreover, tourists buy food and accessories from the local supermarkets, generating revenue for the local vendors. They also book hotels and motels for living. Tourists always buy some unique artifacts or some clothes, wooven bags and other stuff which they like about the place. On a larger scale, when people visit for tourism in the upper valleys of Pakistan, they are soo impressed by the carpet weaving of the people. The elegant designs showcasing rich cultural heritage, with vibrant colours are highly attractive to tourists and specially to those who deal with such businesses. Many foriegn companies have established contacts with local suppliers and the carpet industry in booming because tons and tons of carpet are exported.

To sum up, I do not think that tourism industry can cause damage to local cultures and enviornment because like local people tourists also cherish the beauty of a place. Strong regulations are already present in tourist areas for people to follow. If only something needs to be regulated is the implementation of the given laws. Local tourists and people are more irresponsible towards their role in preserving the culture and environment. Strict monitoring should be carried out in areas which experience high tourism numbers. Otherwise tourism is one of the most booming industry and constant effort should be made to allow it to operate.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

Your position is clear: you do not fully agree that tourism’s harms are ignored, and you argue that tourism supports economies and cultural exchange. The examples of the visitor dancing to Punjabi folk music and the carpet trade in Pakistan make your response relevant and personal. However, the task asks you to assess the damage tourism can cause to local cultures and the environment, and this side is only briefly acknowledged. The conclusion says tourism cannot cause damage and refers to regulations, but it does not explain how tourism may harm environments or cultures, or weigh those risks against the benefits. Develop both sides and qualify your position—for example, explain a specific environmental or cultural cost and how effective regulation could limit it.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a clear overall structure: an introduction, two body paragraphs focused on cultural exchange and economic benefits, and a conclusion. Paragraphs generally have identifiable central ideas, and transitions such as “Moreover” and “To sum up” help readers follow the discussion. Some connections are less smooth or precise, however. The first body paragraph moves from defining types of tourism to a personal video example without clearly linking that example to the claim about healthy international relations. In the final paragraph, the shift from regulations to the claim that local people are more irresponsible is abrupt and not supported by the preceding discussion. Use clearer topic sentences and link each example explicitly to the argument; avoid relying on transition phrases alone to create progression.

Lexical Resource: Band 6.0

You use an adequate range of vocabulary for the topic, including “integrate,” “ethnicities,” “rich cultural heritage,” “vibrant colours,” and “implementation.” These choices help convey ideas about culture and local business, and meaning remains clear. There are also some inaccurate or awkward choices and repeated general terms, such as “stuff,” “for living,” and “tourism industry” used repeatedly. Spelling errors—including “contibutes,” “wooven,” “foriegn,” and “enviornment”—also reduce accuracy. Aim for more precise collocations and check spelling carefully. For instance, describe visitors as “staying in accommodation,” and refer to “local products” or “handicrafts” rather than “stuff.” This would make the vocabulary more natural and specific.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 6.0

You use a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, including relative clauses (“designs showcasing rich cultural heritage”) and conditional phrasing (“If only something needs to be regulated…”). Most sentences communicate their meaning, but some grammatical errors remain. For example, “the local culture and the environmental damage … is overlooked” has a subject–verb agreement problem, while “provides opportunity” needs an article. The sentence beginning “If only something needs to be regulated” is also structurally unclear; a direct form such as “The main issue is ensuring that existing laws are implemented” would be more controlled. Review agreement, articles, and sentence construction, especially in longer sentences. Greater accuracy in these areas would make your argument easier to follow.

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