Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · IELTS Summit Mastery · 2026-11-12

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Tourism is one of the fastest growing industries and contributes a great deal to economies around the world. However, the damage tourism can cause to local cultures and the environment is often ignored.

To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

Nowadays industries that are connected to tourism are rising very rapidly and it contributes a lot in the world’s economy. But it is really a disappointing fact that natural environment and the related local culture are frequently being worsened day by day and people are quite unware of it. I completely agree with this statement.

Since last few decades travelling has become very popular choice of escapism from the hustle and bustle of urban life. Through facebook and other social media platforms people come to know about various types of hidden gem. Whenever they get time they go on a vacation to enjoy the natural breathtaking scenery. Also people prefer to explore new travel destinations even abroad. So the number of foreign tourists are increasing surprisingly and it keeps a major impact on every country's economy by giving frequent chances of earning foreign currency.

It is so unfortunate that people are mostly avoid their responsibility in this aspect. They don't care about those natural environment. I the name of business or providing service like resort or park, they recklessly destroy natural environment like cutting trees without proper plan for hoping to have some extra profit. Besides that local culture and tradition are fading away in the touch of modernism and multicultural people and activity. Furthermore the breathtaking scenery are losing its beauty by being polluted by travellers. Different kinds of plastic and garbage destruct the eye soothing beauty of environment. For example, Cox's Bazar sea beach is one of the largest sea beach in Bangladesh and it has a universal appeal around the whole world. But in recent years, it is losing its appeal for unawareness.

To sum up, it can be reiterate that though tourism industry has one of the largest effect on world's economy, people as well as governments are not enough conscious about the travel destinations and. its culture. All of us including governments should come forward and take necessary steps as early as possible.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

Your position is clear from the introduction: “I completely agree,” and the response addresses both environmental damage and effects on local culture. You also acknowledge tourism’s economic contribution and give a relevant example, Cox’s Bazar, to illustrate pollution and declining appeal. These points make the response relevant and cover the main parts of the question. However, some ideas are more fully explained than others: the economic benefit is described, but the essay does not weigh it against the harms in much detail, and the claim that local traditions fade through “modernism and multicultural people” needs a clearer explanation or example. Develop each main point with a specific cause-and-effect explanation to make the argument more complete and convincing.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The essay has a recognisable structure, with an introduction, separate body paragraphs and a conclusion. The sequence from tourism’s popularity and economic benefits to environmental and cultural costs is generally understandable, and signposts such as “Besides that,” “Furthermore” and “To sum up” help show relationships between points. However, progression within paragraphs is sometimes loose: the second paragraph moves from social media to foreign travel and then economic effects without clearly linking each step. Some linking phrases feel mechanical, and the conclusion repeats earlier claims rather than drawing them together. Use clearer topic sentences and connect examples directly to the point they support; also check references such as “it” in the opening, where the intended subject is not fully clear.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use a range of topic-related vocabulary, including “hustle and bustle,” “hidden gem,” “foreign currency,” “multicultural” and “breathtaking scenery.” These choices show an attempt to express ideas beyond basic vocabulary. However, several word choices and collocations are inaccurate or awkward, such as “keeps a major impact,” “avoid their responsibility,” “in the touch of modernism,” and “eye soothing beauty.” There are also spelling or form errors, including “unware” and “reiterate,” which reduce precision. Aim for natural combinations and check the exact form of less familiar words. For example, use “has a major impact,” “neglect their responsibility,” and “under the influence of modernisation” to express these ideas more clearly.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You attempt both simple and complex sentence forms, including clauses introduced by “Whenever,” “Besides that” and “though,” and most of the argument remains understandable. However, some grammatical errors recur and occasionally make sentences difficult to follow. Examples include “industries … it contributes,” where the subject and verb do not agree, “people are mostly avoid,” and “I the name of business,” which appears to be missing a word. There are also problems with articles, plurals and sentence boundaries, as in “the breathtaking scenery are” and the final “destinations and. its culture.” Review subject–verb agreement, verb forms and punctuation, then proofread each sentence for a complete and correctly connected structure.

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