Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · IELTS Summit Mastery · 2026-11-14

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Tourism is one of the fastest growing industries and contributes a great deal to economies around the world. However, the damage tourism can cause to local cultures and the environment is often ignored.

To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

Tourism is one of the rapidly growing industries around the globe that gain great deal to any country economy.However there is assumption that tourism is causing damage to regional cuture and environment.I agree with it beacuse at some level foriegn indiviual are influencing and changing culture or environment.Language is changing due to tourism.A lot of construction is happening around the globe to attract tourists.

First of all, I will explain that how culture is damaged by tourism.Tourist often travel to other counties but thay dont adapt their culture at some point they speak their own language. Thats why local people have to make some efforts to communicate with them.at some point this is the damage to local language. people feel superior than locals while speaking foriegn languages.Furthuremore,the culture is also damaged by the fear of tourists dislikness in cultural event.If some tourist dislike something in a event that does not match their vibe so local authourities dont want to lose tourist interest.They want tourist to participate in these event.They use power and make changes to cultural event that attracts tourists towards their country.

Tourism has also make damage to environment also.Countries have to construct big concrete buldings for example:airports,hotels and entertainment places etc.In result a massive part of land serve for concrete building so there will be less space for forest and greenry.These concrete bulding will be big problem for hot countries where extreme summer comes every year. These buildings will add increment in temprature of area. In another way, tourist can give damage to environment by throwing trash in the area. This is also an factor of damage to environment but it can stopped by penality to them.Visitors can also damage greenry mountains and heritage of countries if they have another plans beside visiting like spreading terrorism so they will give damage to it.

In conclusion,I like to say that I agree with that view about damage to culture and environment. it can be damaged by language,adaptation of culture,buldings,terrorism and throwing trash.These are the biggest concern in my view damage the environment.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

Your position is clear: you agree that tourism can harm both culture and the environment, and you address both parts of the question. The environmental paragraph gives relevant examples, including construction of airports and hotels, reduced green space, and litter. The cultural paragraph also raises language use and changes to cultural events. However, some points are not fully explained or are unclear. For example, the claim that tourists speaking their own languages damages local language needs a clearer cause-and-effect explanation, and the reference to terrorism is not convincingly connected to ordinary tourism. Develop fewer points with specific, realistic examples and explain how each demonstrates harm.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a recognisable overall structure: an introduction, separate paragraphs on cultural and environmental effects, and a conclusion. This makes the main line of argument easy to follow. You also use signposting such as “First of all,” “Furthermore,” and “In conclusion.” However, some connections are mechanical or unclear. The cultural paragraph moves from tourists speaking their own language to locals feeling superior, without explaining the relationship. In the environmental paragraph, the shift from construction to litter and then terrorism is abrupt. Use clearer topic sentences and link each example explicitly to the paragraph’s main idea; ensure pronouns such as “it” and “these” have clear references.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use vocabulary relevant to the topic, including “construction,” “cultural event,” “environment,” and “local language,” and you attempt to express several distinct effects of tourism. However, the range and control are limited by repeated general words and inaccurate word choices or collocations. Phrases such as “gain great deal to any country economy,” “tourist dislikness,” and “give damage to environment” make some ideas difficult to interpret. Spelling errors, including “cuture,” “foriegn,” and “buldings,” also reduce clarity. Build a bank of accurate topic collocations and check spelling, word forms, and whether each phrase sounds natural in context.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more complex sentences, including cause-and-effect structures such as “If some tourist dislike something…” and “These concrete bulding will be big problem…”. The overall meaning is usually recoverable, but errors in sentence construction and punctuation sometimes make the reader work to understand your ideas. For example, “Tourism has also make damage to environment also” has an incorrect verb form and an awkward sentence pattern, while “If some tourist dislike something in a event…” contains problems with agreement and articles. Several sentences also run together after full stops, and capitalisation is inconsistent. Practise accurate subject–verb agreement, articles, verb forms, and sentence boundaries before adding more complex structures.

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