Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · IELTS Summit Mastery · 2026-08-07

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Tourism is one of the fastest growing industries and contributes a great deal to economies around the world. However, the damage tourism can cause to local cultures and the environment is often ignored.

To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

Undoubtedly touresim is one of the fastest growing industries and it also had a great contribution to the economies around the world. But somehow it affects the life of persons living in the hilly areas where tourist comes for tourism.. People living in the peaceful areas are only for chemical free and good breath, because in the major cities due to the traffic and many other industrial chemical there is more pollution. Meanwhile the peacefull places is beneficial in aspect of pollution.. So when tourist came there on the cars or heavy engine vehicle it causes pollution there and somehow affect the naturaenvironment of that place. The other reason which I thinked is not to keep that place clean. We often see that the modern ways of cleaning are not available in the undeveloped hilly areas.70 percent people didn't care about the cleaness of the place where they visit as a tourist. They boxes of the empty processed foods,, processed beverage , people throw it on the road . So This cause a serious damage to the environment of peacefull places.

So persons are used to cigarettes smoking and cape users. And alots people used to enjoy with cigarettes and vapes in the place of tour. So this causes a serious harm to the environment.

So to keep that environment unignored we should first look the maintenance strategies for the environment.. A specific guide lines should be present at the tourism place that how to keep the area clean.. There should be bins all over in the area so that food leftovers can not be messed up.

So I really agree that due to tourism the environment is often ignored.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0

The response addresses the prompt by expressing a clear agreement with the statement. However, the development of ideas is limited and somewhat repetitive. While you mention pollution and waste management as key issues, the arguments lack depth and specific, well-explained examples. The response tends to focus heavily on littering and smoking rather than the broader cultural and environmental impacts mentioned in the prompt. To improve, ensure you provide more comprehensive explanations for your points and consider the 'cultural' aspect of the prompt, which was largely omitted. The structure is functional, but the ideas need more elaboration to reach a higher band.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The essay is organised into paragraphs, but the logical flow is often interrupted by repetitive sentence structures and a lack of varied cohesive devices. You rely heavily on 'So' to start sentences, which makes the progression feel mechanical rather than fluid. Referencing is sometimes unclear, such as in the phrase 'the other reason which I thinked is not to keep that place clean,' which lacks a clear antecedent. To improve, use a wider variety of linking words (e.g., 'furthermore,' 'consequently,' 'in addition') and ensure each paragraph has a clear topic sentence that connects back to your main argument.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary is generally adequate for the task but lacks the precision and range required for higher bands. There are several instances of awkward word choices and non-standard phrasing, such as 'chemical free and good breath,' 'naturaenvironment,' and 'cape users.' Spelling errors, such as 'touresim' and 'cleaness,' also occur. While the meaning is generally clear, the limited range of vocabulary prevents a more sophisticated discussion of the topic. Focus on learning collocations and more academic terminology related to environmental and economic issues to enhance your writing.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

The essay contains frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede the flow of reading. Issues include subject-verb agreement ('tourist comes,' 'places is beneficial'), incorrect verb tenses ('I thinked'), and awkward sentence construction ('70 percent people didn't care'). There is a lack of complex sentence structures, as most sentences are simple or contain basic errors. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence patterns, subject-verb agreement, and correct punctuation. Proofreading for common errors like missing articles and incorrect verb forms will significantly improve your accuracy.

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