Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · IELTS Summit Mastery · 2026-08-07
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Tourism is one of the fastest growing industries and contributes a great deal to economies around the world. However, the damage tourism can cause to local cultures and the environment is often ignored.
To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
In the modern era, the tourism industry increase significantly which also contributes a economic and infrastructure improvement across the world. Nevertheless, due to over tourism effect local cultures as well as environment which often ignored because economic improvement lead to better opportunity for residents. I strongly agree with this statement.
One the one hand, increasing tourist act as catalyst roles for countries cause it allows economic improvement and create new job market, although it has some drawbacks. But enhancing jobs opportunities far more advantages living peacefully. When tourist spends money at a hotel, that money dose not disappear the hotel pays its staff and other sectors so the cycle contributes residents life style. Moreover, tourist can lead a growth of investment and funding as well as it can decline bridge in the gap between international understanding and wars. For instance, Japan, Spain and Maldives provides several tourists attraction which helping their economic development also create good relationship around the world.
Conversely, Overwhelmingly increasing tourism can create devastation situation for environment because wasting products and need to use over transportation during peak season, which also soar carbon emission. In addition, undoubtedly ocean and costal damage also climate change thereby people often face por
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 250 words, as it is only 202 words long. This significantly impacts the development of ideas, leading to an incomplete essay that cuts off abruptly in the second body paragraph. While you clearly state your position in the introduction, the arguments are underdeveloped due to the lack of length. To improve, you must ensure you provide a full conclusion and expand on your supporting points with more detailed examples and analysis to fully address all parts of the prompt.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The essay uses some basic cohesive devices such as 'On the one hand' and 'Moreover', but the flow is often disrupted by grammatical errors and awkward phrasing. Paragraphing is attempted, but the final paragraph is incomplete, which hinders the overall logical progression of the argument. The relationship between ideas is sometimes unclear due to the fragmented nature of the sentences. To improve, focus on using a wider variety of linking words and ensure that each paragraph has a clear topic sentence followed by fully developed supporting ideas.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is generally limited and repetitive. You rely on basic terms like 'good' or 'improvement' and struggle with collocations, such as 'catalyst roles' or 'devastation situation'. There are also several instances of word-choice errors, such as 'decline bridge in the gap' and 'wasting products'. To reach a higher band, you should aim to use more precise academic vocabulary and collocations, such as 'economic prosperity' instead of 'economic improvement' or 'environmental degradation' instead of 'devastation situation'.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The essay contains frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede communication. There are consistent issues with subject-verb agreement ('tourism industry increase', 'tourist spends money'), article usage, and sentence structure. Many sentences are awkward or incomplete, such as 'the cycle contributes residents life style'. The range of structures is limited, and the errors are frequent enough to cause difficulty for the reader. You need to focus on basic sentence construction, specifically ensuring correct verb forms and proper use of prepositions and articles.
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