Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · IELTS Summit Mastery · 2026-08-20
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Tourism is one of the fastest growing industries and contributes a great deal to economies around the world. However, the damage tourism can cause to local cultures and the environment is often ignored.
To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
Tourism is seen as the rapidly growing industries and impacts positively to the economy around the world. Moreso, the negation of tourism to local heritage and it's environ is neglected. I agree and in this essay i'm going to give my reasons with relevant examples.
Traveling industries contribute greatly to the economy of the countries because of the exchange rates. When visitors arrive the port of a country, he or she will have to exchange their currency to the local currency to be able to make transactions while in the country for the period of visit thereby impacting the economies through hospitality industry, to restaurants, to transportation and so on.
on the contrary, the tourist during the period of stay may influence the culture of the visiting country negatively either by taking alcohol or kissing publicly. Take for instance a muslim country where alcohol in an open place is highly prohibited and some things that are considered immoral or against their religion can be
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0
The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 250 words, as it is only 164 words long. Consequently, the ideas are significantly underdeveloped and the essay is incomplete, ending abruptly mid-sentence. While you have identified a position and provided some relevant points regarding economic benefits and cultural impact, the lack of development and the failure to complete the task severely limit the score. To improve, you must ensure you provide a full introduction, well-developed body paragraphs with supporting evidence, and a clear conclusion, while meeting the minimum length requirement.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The essay shows some attempt at logical organization by separating economic benefits from cultural concerns. However, the progression is interrupted by the incomplete nature of the text. Cohesive devices are used in a somewhat mechanical way, such as 'on the contrary' and 'take for instance', but the overall structure is undermined by the abrupt ending. Paragraphing is present, but the final paragraph is unfinished, which prevents a coherent flow of ideas. To improve, focus on completing your thoughts and using a wider variety of linking words to connect your arguments more fluidly.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary used is generally adequate for basic communication but lacks the range and precision required for higher bands. There are some awkward collocations, such as 'negation of tourism' (likely meaning 'negative impact') and 'it's environ' (incorrect use of possessive 'its' and word choice). You rely on simple, repetitive phrasing like 'contribute greatly' and 'impacts positively'. To achieve a higher score, you should aim to use more sophisticated vocabulary and precise collocations related to the topic of tourism and socio-economic impacts, while ensuring accurate word forms.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The essay contains a mix of simple and some complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede clarity. Examples include 'Tourism is seen as the rapidly growing industries' (subject-verb agreement error), 'impacts positively to the economy' (incorrect preposition), and 'it's environ' (punctuation error). The incomplete sentence at the end also affects the grammatical integrity of the piece. To improve, focus on subject-verb agreement, correct preposition usage, and proofreading for basic punctuation errors like the misuse of apostrophes.
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