Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · IELTS Summit Mastery · 2026-08-21

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Tourism is one of the fastest growing industries and contributes a great deal to economies around the world. However, the damage tourism can cause to local cultures and the environment is often ignored.

To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

Tourist places are one of the famous places who attract the tourism and help to contributes a large deal to economic sector. while the tourist damage the local culture and the ecosystem id often ignored by authority. I am strongly agree in this view which is discus in the fourth comming paragraph .

To begin with , the hand of the tourism in fast growing economies around the world . To Explane , when tourist stay in Hottels or flats and purchase crucial things it is very use full for shopkeepers some five star resturant work with the help of the tourist .For example, Taj mahal is the one of the famous place in India thousands of tourist vist India only for view taj mahal and the local shopkeper sales thier item and make profit . Hence, tourism grown up the economey around the world

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0

The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 250 words, reaching only 145 words. Consequently, the task is only partially addressed. While you state your position clearly in the introduction, the development of ideas is severely limited. You provide a brief example regarding the Taj Mahal, but you fail to address the second part of the prompt concerning the damage to local cultures and the environment. To improve, you must ensure you cover all parts of the question and expand your arguments with sufficient detail and examples to meet the length requirement.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The essay shows some attempt at organization with an introduction and a body paragraph. However, the progression of ideas is hindered by the lack of a full response. Cohesive devices are used, such as 'To begin with' and 'For example', but they are sometimes used incorrectly or in a mechanical way. The paragraphing is insufficient, and the overall structure is incomplete, which makes the flow of the argument difficult to follow. You need to focus on linking your ideas more logically and ensuring each paragraph has a clear topic sentence and supporting details.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

Your vocabulary is limited and often repetitive. There are several issues with word choice and collocation, such as 'contributes a large deal' (should be 'contributes a great deal') and 'grown up the economey' (should be 'boosted the economy'). You rely on basic vocabulary and struggle to express more complex ideas accurately. To reach a higher band, you should work on expanding your range of vocabulary, focusing on collocations and using more precise academic terms instead of general, informal language.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

There are frequent grammatical errors throughout the text that occasionally impede communication. Examples include 'I am strongly agree' (should be 'I strongly agree'), 'which is discus' (should be 'which is discussed'), and 'tourist vist India' (should be 'tourists visit India'). The sentence structures are mostly simple, and there is a lack of complex sentence forms. Punctuation is also inconsistent, particularly with spacing around commas. You need to focus on basic subject-verb agreement, verb tenses, and sentence construction to improve your accuracy.

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