Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.0 · IELTS Summit Mastery · 2026-08-21
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Tourism is one of the fastest growing industries and contributes a great deal to economies around the world. However, the damage tourism can cause to local cultures and the environment is often ignored.
To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 4.0)
The given line demonstrate the information about the tourism is one of the fastest growing industries and contributes a great deal to economies over the world. However, the damage tourism can cause to local cultures and environment is often ignored which has always been debatable. some people argue with this statement while others strongly reject this notion. In my point of view, it's a great development for countries especially for governements. This statement briefly discuss in further paragraphs.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 3.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.5 |
| Overall | 4.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 3.0
The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 250 words, reaching only 78 words. Consequently, the task is not addressed in any meaningful depth. The introduction attempts to set up the topic but fails to provide a clear, developed position or supporting arguments. Because the response is severely under-length and lacks the necessary body paragraphs to explore the complexities of tourism's impact on culture and the environment, it cannot be considered a complete essay. To improve, you must expand your ideas into full paragraphs with specific examples and clear reasoning.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0
The text is too short to demonstrate effective paragraphing or a logical progression of ideas. While there is a basic attempt to introduce the topic, the transition to the body of the essay is missing. Cohesive devices are minimal, and the structure is fragmented. To achieve a higher band, you need to organize your response into a clear introduction, at least two body paragraphs with topic sentences, and a conclusion, using a variety of linking words to connect your ideas logically.
Lexical Resource — Band 4.5
The vocabulary used is basic and repetitive. Phrases like 'great deal' and 'fastest growing industries' are standard, but there is a lack of sophisticated or topic-specific vocabulary related to the environmental or cultural impacts of tourism. There are also errors in word choice, such as 'The given line demonstrate' (should be 'The given statement demonstrates'). To improve, focus on learning collocations related to global issues and ensure you use precise terminology to express your arguments clearly.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.5
The response contains several grammatical errors that hinder clarity. For example, 'The given line demonstrate' shows a subject-verb agreement error. The sentence 'This statement briefly discuss in further paragraphs' is grammatically incorrect and should be 'This statement will be briefly discussed in the following paragraphs.' The range of structures is very limited, consisting mostly of simple sentences. To improve, practice using complex sentence structures, such as relative clauses and conditional forms, and pay closer attention to subject-verb agreement and verb tenses.
See this exact question answered at other band scores — the same prompt compared across bands.
Browse more IELTS Writing model answers or get your own writing scored by the same AI examiner.