Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · IELTS Summit Mastery · 2026-08-25

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Tourism is one of the fastest growing industries and contributes a great deal to economies around the world. However, the damage tourism can cause to local cultures and the environment is often ignored.

To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

Tourism is all over the rapidly boosting department and gives huge deal to financially across the world. On the other hand, the big loss tourism can deliver to local culture and environment is sometime not focused. I strongly agree with statement and i will give detail of my opinion as well as example and reasons also.

First of all, tourism in the world is that income which helps that region financially at that stage which gives a big percentage in total GDP of that specific region. For example, according to world tourist report, every year huge amount of people overseas comes to northern areas of the Pakistan for enjoy their vacations or visit the natural beauty. This shows the interest of majority of the world for the tourism.

Secondly, the loss of natural beauty by the visitor and the culture of that specific area is also a major loss in the way of tourism. According to a government report published by department of the tourism, tourists make the environment unbalanced and also gives a bad impression to the environment .

Accordance to my point of view , tourism can gives advantages to the economy but also have a disadvantage of loss of local culture and surrounding environment. Tourism also gives the message of safety and delightful surrounding of that part of the world.

To conclude that, tourism is very helpful for growth of the world in every way but sometime it makes the cultural missing as well as environment also.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0

The response addresses the prompt by acknowledging both the economic benefits and the negative impacts of tourism. However, the development of ideas is limited. While you mention the economic contribution to Pakistan, the explanation is somewhat superficial. The discussion regarding environmental and cultural damage is also quite brief and lacks specific, well-explained examples. To improve, ensure that each main point is supported by a clear, logical explanation that directly relates back to the prompt. The position is clear, but the overall depth of argument needs to be increased to move beyond a basic level of analysis.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The essay is organised into paragraphs, which is a positive step. However, the use of cohesive devices is often mechanical or inaccurate, such as 'Accordance to my point of view' and 'To conclude that'. The progression of ideas is sometimes disjointed, making it difficult for the reader to follow the flow of the argument. Referencing is occasionally unclear, and the transitions between sentences could be smoother. To improve, focus on using a wider variety of linking words and phrases more naturally, and ensure that each paragraph has a clear topic sentence that guides the reader through your argument.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary is limited and often repetitive. There are several instances of awkward word choices and incorrect collocations, such as 'rapidly boosting department' instead of 'growing industry' and 'gives huge deal' instead of 'makes a significant contribution'. Some phrases are used incorrectly, which occasionally impedes the clarity of your message. To reach a higher band, you should aim to use a broader range of vocabulary, including less common lexical items, and focus on using words in their correct context. Pay closer attention to collocations and avoid translating directly from your native language.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

The essay contains a high frequency of grammatical errors, including subject-verb agreement issues ('tourism can gives', 'tourists... gives a bad impression') and incorrect sentence structures. There is a limited range of complex structures, and those that are attempted often contain errors. Punctuation is also inconsistent. While the meaning is generally understandable, the frequent errors distract the reader and indicate a lack of control over complex grammar. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction, subject-verb agreement, and the correct use of articles and prepositions before attempting more complex structures.

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