Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · IELTS Summit Mastery · 2026-09-03

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Tourism is one of the fastest growing industries and contributes a great deal to economies around the world. However, the damage tourism can cause to local cultures and the environment is often ignored.

To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 4.0)

Nowdays, many people are dealing with lot of industries and tourism is world well know rising company. the effects of local cultures has been ignored in this nation

One major advantange of tourism industries selling there products in local cultures and products they are ususlly more affordable they can but easily However,the damage products can reduce the amountof waste sent to landfill sitesand decrease the demand of manufuring.

Consequently,buying used goods can benefits both tourism consumer and the enviroment.

On the other hand, demage products are not always at good condition for a long time. Moreover, finding a perfect size it is so diffiults because availibles selection is unpredictable but this happend tourism has been ignored purshasing demage goods may sometimes be less convenients for instance ,unlike new items

,used goods may have hidden damges buying offices revises limtied protection .

In conclution, buying demage products can be save money ,reduce enviroments waste,but concern about quality and reliabilty remain overall ,advantage considerable provided that consumes carefully check products before buying them

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 3.0

The response fails to address the prompt effectively. The essay is significantly under the 250-word minimum, which severely limits the development of ideas. Furthermore, the content is largely off-topic; the student discusses 'buying used goods' and 'damaged products' instead of the impact of tourism on culture and the environment. Because the response does not engage with the core subject matter of the prompt and is incomplete, it does not meet the requirements for a passing band score.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0

The essay lacks a logical progression of ideas. While there are paragraph breaks, the internal structure of the paragraphs is disjointed. Cohesive devices are used incorrectly or in a mechanical fashion, such as 'Consequently' and 'On the other hand,' which do not logically connect the preceding and following sentences. The lack of a clear introduction and conclusion further hinders the flow of the argument, making it difficult for the reader to follow the writer's train of thought.

Lexical Resource — Band 4.0

The vocabulary is very limited and often inaccurate. There are frequent errors in word choice, such as using 'demage' instead of 'damaged' and 'company' instead of 'industry.' The range of vocabulary is insufficient to express complex ideas, and the repetition of words like 'products' and 'tourism' indicates a lack of lexical variety. Many phrases are unintelligible due to poor collocation, which significantly impedes the reader's understanding of the intended meaning.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0

The response contains frequent grammatical errors that often distort meaning. There are significant issues with sentence structure, including run-on sentences and fragments (e.g., 'Nowdays, many people are dealing with lot of industries...'). Punctuation is used incorrectly throughout, and there is a lack of control over basic verb tenses and subject-verb agreement. The range of structures is extremely limited, consisting mostly of simple, error-prone sentences that fail to demonstrate control over complex grammatical forms.

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