Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · IELTS Summit Mastery · 2026-09-05

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Tourism is one of the fastest growing industries and contributes a great deal to economies around the world. However, the damage tourism can cause to local cultures and the environment is often ignored.

To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 4.0)

Nowadays, Tourism is one of the fastest growing industries and contributes a great deal to economies around the world has become a widely discussed issue. Some people believe that the damage tourism can cause to local cultures and environment while others argue that tourism people develop culture. In my opinion, tourism didn't damege local culture and environment. This essay will discuss the main reasons for this view.

The first reason is that damege tourism can cause to local cultures and the environment is often ignored. This is mainly because because local people see the tourism and follow his cultures and clothes. In other words, tourism didn't damege cause to local cultures and the environment is often ignored. For example, people are busy they didn't have time for see other people.

Another important point is that tourism can cause to local cultures and the environment is often ignored. One possible explanation is that local people follow western culture. Moreover, . For instance, [specific example]. As a result, [consequence]. Thus, it is evident that [link to the main argument].

Conclusion

In conclusion, [restate the topic] is an important issue. Although there are arguments on both sides, I believe that [your opinion]. This is because [main idea 1] and [main idea 2]. Overall, [final recommendation/general statement].

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0

The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 250 words, which significantly impacts the development of ideas. The essay is largely incomplete, featuring placeholders such as '[specific example]' and '[consequence]', which prevents the development of a coherent argument. While a position is stated in the introduction, the body paragraphs do not provide relevant or logical support for this stance. The content is repetitive, often restating the prompt rather than exploring the complexities of tourism's impact on culture and the environment. To improve, you must fully flesh out your arguments with concrete examples and ensure the essay reaches the required length.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0

The essay lacks logical progression. While there is an attempt at paragraphing, the content within the paragraphs is disconnected and repetitive. The use of cohesive devices is mechanical and often misused, such as the repetitive use of 'This is mainly because' followed by incoherent explanations. The referencing is unclear, and the structure is severely compromised by the inclusion of bracketed placeholders, which disrupts the flow of the text. To achieve a higher band, focus on using transition signals to link ideas logically and ensure each paragraph has a clear topic sentence followed by supporting details.

Lexical Resource — Band 4.0

The vocabulary is very limited and repetitive. There are frequent errors in word choice and spelling, such as 'damege' instead of 'damage'. The range of vocabulary is insufficient to discuss the topic in any depth, relying heavily on words provided in the prompt. There is no evidence of less common lexical items or an awareness of collocation. To improve, you should expand your vocabulary related to tourism, economics, and environmental science, and focus on using words accurately in context rather than repeating the same phrases throughout the essay.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0

The grammatical range is very limited, consisting mostly of simple, error-prone sentences. There are frequent errors in subject-verb agreement, tense usage, and sentence structure, such as 'tourism didn't damege local culture' and 'people are busy they didn't have time'. These errors are frequent and often impede the reader's understanding. There is little evidence of complex sentence structures, and where attempted, they are often grammatically incorrect. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction, including correct verb tenses and punctuation, before attempting more complex structures.

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