Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · IELTS Summit Mastery · 2026-09-12

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Tourism is one of the fastest growing industries and contributes a great deal to economies around the world. However, the damage tourism can cause to local cultures and the environment is often ignored.

To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

In recent years,people prefer to travel all around the world.Tourism has become the fastest growing industries and it helps to contributes a excellent fund around the world.Though, majority times,the damage of tourism to local society,communities and environment is unseen.This eassy will articulate the reason of my agreement in forthcoming paragraphs.

To commence with the first reason of my agreement,tourists often throw dust in nearby area while visiting new place.To be more precise,it has been seen that many times individuals has not understading of the importance of nature beacuse they are busy in exploring new place and clicking pictures.So many travellers just throw their garbage in near are, later it will lead to negative impace on environment.Though,local people do complaint about it but high authority has their focus on profit.For instance, popular beaches often become polluted because visitors leave plastic bottles and other waste behind. Similarly, forests may be cleared to build hotels and tourist attractions. As a result, natural areas can lose their beauty and wildlife can be affected. Therefore, uncontrolled tourism can have a negative impact on the environment.

To compelling further on my agreement,toursim can also affect to local cultures.To elaborate further,When many tourists visit a place, local people may change their traditional lifestyle to meet tourists' expectations. Traditional customs can sometimes become commercial rather than being practised for cultural reasons.For example, local festivals may be changed into shows for tourists, while traditional products may be produced mainly for visitors instead of local people.Consequently, some cultural traditions may lose their original value, and younger generations may become less interested in preserving them.

To recapitulate,I believe that toursim place signficant role in economical growth of nation.The great growth of toursim industry has a harmful effect on environment,such as it polluts nearby area.Further,local cultures may lose thir charm in near future.To deal with it,high authorities should take considerably steps.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

The student addresses all parts of the prompt, taking a clear stance agreeing that tourism causes hidden damage to the environment and local cultures. The position is maintained throughout the essay. Main ideas are presented and supported with relevant examples, such as popular beaches becoming polluted and traditional festivals changing into commercial shows for tourists. However, some arguments lack deep extension, and the conclusion introduces a new point about economic growth that was not thoroughly explored in the main body paragraphs. Nevertheless, the response covers the requirements well, fitting comfortably into the Band 6 or 7 range for Task Achievement. Because the ideas are relevant and supported with valid examples, a band score of 6.5 is appropriate, as all parts are addressed with a clear position, though some ideas tend to over-generalise.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The essay displays a coherent overall arrangement with a clear attempt at paragraphing, separating the introduction, two body paragraphs, and a conclusion. Cohesive devices are used, such as 'To commence with', 'To elaborate further', and 'To recapitulate', though some phrases sound slightly unnatural or mechanical. Referencing and logical progression are generally clear, enabling the reader to follow the writer's arguments without significant confusion. However, occasional awkward transitions and minor cohesion issues prevent the text from reaching a higher band. Overall, the organization is logical and easy to follow, supporting a Band 6.0 performance under Coherence and Cohesion.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

The student demonstrates an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, attempting less common items such as 'commercial', 'uncontrolled tourism', and 'traditional lifestyle'. However, there are noticeable word choice and collocation errors, such as 'contributes a excellent fund', 'throw dust in nearby area', 'individuals has not understading', and 'take considerably steps'. Spelling errors also occur, such as 'eassy', 'impace', 'toursim', and 'polluts'. Despite these errors, the vocabulary is sufficient to convey the intended meaning without severely impeding communication. These characteristics align well with the Band 6 descriptor for Lexical Resource.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

The writer uses a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, attempting structures like 'When many tourists visit a place, local people may change their traditional lifestyle...' However, frequent grammatical errors are present throughout the text, including subject-verb agreement issues ('individuals has not understading', 'toursim place signficant role'), article misuse ('helps to contributes a excellent fund'), and punctuation spacing errors. While these errors occur frequently and affect readability, the meaning is generally recoverable and communication is rarely impeded entirely. This performance sits securely at Band 5.5, reflecting a mix of sentence types alongside persistent grammatical inaccuracies.

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