Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.5 · IELTS Summit Mastery · 2026-09-12
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Tourism is one of the fastest growing industries and contributes a great deal to economies around the world. However, the damage tourism can cause to local cultures and the environment is often ignored.
To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 4.5)
In rapidly evolving world, tourism is best for individual countries to boost country economy. Moreover, tourism is one of the greatest growing company and also, give huge idea to economies at whole world. But, damage tourism can also reason that local cultures and the around environment is also ignored. I fully agree with this statement. This essay will articulate tourism can ignored local culture as well as, the environment along with, my own statement.
To begin with, there are some negative side that tourism can ignored local culture as well as, the environment. To be more precise, many tourist can ignored local culture and the environment. They get's wrong idea about local culture. For example, some people are go to some spiritual place after that they, misbehave in this place. Therefore, they have not proper idea about this place. As a result, people are get wrong idea about spiritual place.
On the other hand, it is another dark side for the circumstance, as, people not proper dispose garbage. They thought anywhere. To be more precise, people ate thought waste anywhere. Looking at, I went to Shimla, many tourist are arrived their. However they did not put garbage in dustbin. So, they did not proper care our environment. Consequently, environment are polluted in spiritual place.
To conclusion, tourism is importance for whole countries to grow country success. However, there are some negative side that tourism often ignored such as, they have wrong idea about spiritual place, and also they pollute over environment.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response addresses the prompt by taking a clear position ('I fully agree with this statement') and discusses both local cultures and the environment, albeit superficially. Ideas such as tourists misbehaving at spiritual places or littering in Shimla are presented to support the argument. However, the development is limited and repetitive, with over-generalised statements rather than well-extended arguments. While the response touches upon all parts of the task, the depth of discussion places it firmly in the Band 5 category, as the ideas are under-developed and lack mature elaboration.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0
The essay is divided into an introduction, two body paragraphs, and a brief conclusion, indicating a basic paragraph structure. However, the overall progression is heavily hindered by disjointed sentences and misuse of cohesive devices. Transitional phrases such as 'To be more precise', 'On the other hand', and 'To conclusion' are either used incorrectly or do not logically fit the context. Referencing is also faulty, for instance, using 'They thought anywhere' and 'Looking at, I went to Shimla'. Consequently, the logical flow is repeatedly disrupted, characteristic of Band 4 organisation and cohesion.
Lexical Resource — Band 4.0
The vocabulary used is basic and repetitive, frequently impeded by severe word choice and collocation errors. Examples include 'boost country economy', 'greatest growing company', 'around environment', and 'people ate thought waste anywhere'. The student attempts less common items like 'articulate' and 'spiritual place', but these are used incorrectly or awkwardly. Frequent errors in word formation and phrasing cause considerable strain for the reader throughout the text, matching the descriptors for Band 4.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0
Grammatical control is weak, with a very limited range of sentence structures. The majority of sentences contain major errors in tense, subject-verb agreement, articles, and sentence construction. Examples of errors include 'In rapidly evolving world', 'many tourist can ignored', 'They get's wrong idea', and 'environment are polluted'. Complex structures are attempted—for example, in conditional or relative clauses—but they invariably result in faulty, non-sensical grammar. Errors are frequent and often distort meaning, aligning with Band 4.
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