Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · IELTS Summit Mastery · 2026-09-12

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Tourism is one of the fastest growing industries and contributes a great deal to economies around the world. However, the damage tourism can cause to local cultures and the environment is often ignored.

To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

TOURISM IS A MAJOR PART OF ECONOMY FOR MANY COUNTRIES LIKE ITALY SWITZERLAND DUBAI THEY TOTALLY DEPENDENT ON TOURISM THERE ECONOMY RUNS ON TOURISM ON THE OTHER HAND THE ANSWER TO YOUR QUESTION THAT TOURISM DAMAGE THE CULTURE OR ENVIRONMENT IS NOT TO BE THAT MUCH TRUE BUT CANT BE IGNORES YEAH I AGREE THAT SOME OF TOURIST FROM THE THE 3RD WORLD ECONOMY HAD NOTHING KNOW ABOUT THE CULTURE THE HISTORY OF COUNTRY AND THEY DO WHATEVER THEY DO IN THEIR COUNTRY THE SOCIALISM IS VERY GENULIY IMPORTANT BUT THAT NOT MEANS THAT THEY AFFECT BECAUSE IT NO THEIR ISSUE ITS THE COUNTRY ISSUE WHERE THEY LIVED BEFORE WHEN THEY CAME FROM 3RD WORLD TO THE LARGEST DEVELOPED ECONOMIC COUNTRY THEY TAKE TIME TO BE ADJUST WHILE TOURISM IS NOT DESTROYING LOCAL CULTURES WHILE TOURISM INCREASE THE CULTURE POWER TOURISM TO DIFFERENT WORLD CAME AND SEE THE CULTURE OF THE DIFFERENT NATION THIS WAS VERY NEWLY AND HONOURABLE FOR THEM CULTURE IS CULTURE CULTURE CANT BE DESTRYOED IF THE CULTURE IS IN YOUR BLOOD THE PEOPLES THAT SPEAK PUNJABI AND FOLLOW CULTURE FROM 100 YEARS THEY STILL FOLLOW THE PASHTOONS FROM DIFFER TRIBES FOLLOW THEIR CULTURE SO CULTURE CANT BE AFFECTED OR IF WE TALK ABOUT ENVIRONMENT THAN THATS THE SAME THING I EXPLAIN BEFORE THAT WHEN PEOPLE CAME THEY ADJUST WITH THE LIVING STANDARDS OF THOSE COUNTRY IF SOMEONE FROM SUPER COUNTRY GOES TO THIRD WORLD COUNTRY YOU WILL HAVE TO BE ADJUSTED IN THOSE ENVIRONMENT SO THAT THE REASON I AGREED AND HONOURABELY DISAGREED

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0

The response attempts to address the prompt regarding the economic benefits of tourism versus the damage it causes to local cultures and the environment. However, the position is not always entirely clear due to confusing reasoning, such as claiming that tourists from third-world economies do not understand local cultures but simultaneously arguing that culture cannot be destroyed because it is deeply ingrained. Ideas are limited and under-developed, with a heavy reliance on sweeping generalisations rather than sustained, logical support. While the student does touch upon both parts of the prompt, the development lacks depth and structure, aligning best with a Band 5 performance.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0

The entire response is written as a single, massive run-on paragraph without any division into introductions, body paragraphs, or a conclusion. There is a complete lack of paragraphing, which significantly impedes the logical organisation and progression of ideas. Cohesive devices are largely absent or misused, relying instead on endless comma splices and run-on sentences (e.g., 'ON THE OTHER HAND THE ANSWER TO YOUR QUESTION...'). While there is a loose progression of thoughts from economic importance to cultural impact and finally environmental impact, the severe lack of punctuation and structural formatting makes it very difficult to follow, earning a Band 4.

Lexical Resource — Band 4.0

The vocabulary used is basic, repetitive, and often imprecise. The student frequently repeats words such as 'TOURISM', 'CULTURE', and 'COUNTRY' within very short spans. There are also notable lexical errors and inappropriate word choices, such as 'cultural power', 'super country', and 'honourabely disagreed'. The limited and repetitive range of vocabulary, combined with frequent word-choice errors and a lack of control over collocation, matches the descriptors for Band 4.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0

The writing suffers from severe punctuation issues, specifically the complete lack of periods, commas, or capitalisation control, as the entire text is presented in capital letters without standard sentence boundaries. There is a very limited range of grammatical structures attempted, and sentences are overwhelmingly fused together incorrectly. Frequent errors in tense, subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'THEY TOTALLY DEPENDENT', 'THEIR ECONOMY RUNS'), and awkward syntax cause considerable difficulty for the reader and distort meaning, placing this clearly at Band 4.

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