Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.5 · IELTS Summit Mastery · 2026-09-14
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Tourism is one of the fastest growing industries and contributes a great deal to economies around the world. However, the damage tourism can cause to local cultures and the environment is often ignored.
To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 4.5)
Tourism is one of the rapid growing enterprises and donate a best deal to economic around the world . This essay will discuss both view as far as i am concerned i am in favour of former nation .
To commence with , tourism is one of the rapid growing company and donate economics around the world . To explain it , if the tourism is boost quickly , it enhances our practical skills and increase life expectancy . It also generate revenue . For example now a days many tourism are arriving in different places to exploring new places . Hence it is proved this is the best way of tourism .
Shifting towards final view , the harm tourism can cause to local culture and the environment is mostly ignored . In other words it can increase financial burden and decrease productivity , it increase productivity ,such as when tourism arrives they explore every places . And have their economic boos . Hence , it is disputable fact that they can easily afford ,
In conclusion , although i opine that it is best way to boost the economic growth , and live long standard because if the tourism come to explore new places and they boost the economic growth , live a lavish life and learn about social awareness and have a pressure cultural diversion , it also built the self confidence . This is the reason why i choose the former nation and live a comfoprtable life .
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response attempts to address the prompt by discussing the economic benefits of tourism against the negative impacts on culture and environment. However, the development of ideas is severely limited and often confused. Phrases such as 'former nation' to describe a viewpoint show a misunderstanding of vocabulary and task requirements. While a position is stated, the arguments are repetitive, lack logical support, and frequently drift into unrelated claims, such as improving 'practical skills' or living standards, without clearly establishing a cohesive position on the extent of agreement. Consequently, the task is addressed only partially, placing this response at Band 5.0.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The essay is organized into paragraphs with basic structural markers such as 'To commence with' and 'In conclusion'. However, there is no clear overall progression of ideas. Cohesive devices are used mechanically and often inappropriately, as seen in repetitive phrasing between paragraphs. Paragraphing is attempted, but internal paragraph coherence is lacking due to disconnected sentences and frequent non-sequiturs. Referencing pronouns like 'they' often lacks clear antecedents, causing confusion for the reader. These issues indicate a level consistent with Band 5.0.
Lexical Resource — Band 4.0
The vocabulary used is very limited and basic, with frequent inappropriate word choices and collocations that impede understanding. Examples include 'rapid growing enterprises', 'donate a best deal', 'economic boos', and 'pressure cultural diversion'. Spelling errors such as 'comfoprtable' and word form errors occur throughout the text. While the student attempts less common items, the misuse of these words severely restricts the precision and natural flow of the writing, reflecting the descriptors for Band 4.0.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0
The response displays a very limited range of grammatical structures. Simple sentences dominate, and attempts at complex structures are consistently faulty and grammatically flawed, such as 'if the tourism come to explore new places and they boost the economic growth'. Errors in tense, subject-verb agreement, and articles are frequent throughout the text, including 'tourism are arriving' and 'the rapid growing company'. These persistent errors cause frequent strain and difficulty for the reader, aligning with Band 4.0 descriptors.
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