Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · IELTS Summit Mastery · 2026-09-16

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Tourism is one of the fastest growing industries and contributes a great deal to economies around the world. However, the damage tourism can cause to local cultures and the environment is often ignored.

To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

Tourism has changed the global economy in a drastic way. Every country focuses on tourism because by tourism a country can grow faster and take a strong global position. Tourism is crucially playing the role in economy whereas a drawback seen that the foreigners cause damage to the environment and at the local level which is often neglecte by the government.

While, I believe that the if damage caused by the foreigner, it does not matters at all because tourism not just brings economical growth at government level but also found beneficial at the local level.

Nowadays, every country is welcoming towards foreigners. There is a logic behind it, Foreigners take their country's money and spend it on the country they visit and by this, eventually the country on which dollars are spending grows globally. For instance, America is the biggest inspiration for all the states because it has opened there gates for all the tourists and by this America made a certain position around the globe.However, economically aur socially tourism has its benefits which is undeniable.

Meanwhile, a disadvantage seen locally that the tourism affects the culture by adding there own values and norms to it and cause damage to the nature. Nevertheless, with optimistic perpective it should be count as a cultural diversity which is added to the country and damage can be minimal as comparing it with growth.

In conclusion, the tourism not just drastically increase the socioeconomical growth yet it adds a values to the society by cultural diversity. Counteries which seems welcoming towards the tourist are now at the highest rank on the globe.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

The response addresses the prompt by discussing both the economic benefits of tourism and its negative impacts on local cultures and the environment, taking a clear position in favour of tourism. However, the development of ideas is limited and at times superficial, particularly regarding environmental damage, which the writer dismisses quickly by arguing that economic growth outweighs it. Phrases like 'it does not matters at all' show an over-generalisation typical of Band 6. While all parts of the prompt are touched upon, the arguments lack depth and the conclusion relies heavily on previously stated points without extending them significantly. This fits the Band 6 descriptor well.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5

The essay is divided into an introduction, three body paragraphs, and a brief conclusion, showing a coherent overall arrangement. Paragraphing is utilised, though some paragraphs mix distinct ideas. Cohesive devices are present ('For instance', 'However', 'In conclusion'), but referencing is sometimes faulty or mechanical, as seen in sentences like 'the if damage caused by the foreigner, it does not matters at all'. The logical progression is occasionally disrupted by awkward phrasing and abrupt transitions between sentences, such as the sudden shift from discussing America to socio-economic benefits. This level of cohesive management and referencing corresponds to a Band 5.5 or rounded to Band 6.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

The student demonstrates an adequate vocabulary range for the task, attempting less common items such as 'socioeconomical growth', 'cultural diversity', and 'global position'. However, there are numerous word choice, collocation, and spelling errors that detract from the writing, such as 'neglecte' instead of 'neglected', 'aur' instead of 'or', 'perpective' instead of 'perspective', and 'Counteries' instead of 'Countries'. Furthermore, phrases like 'opened there gates' misuse possessive pronouns. These errors do not entirely impede communication, but they restrict the lexical score to Band 5.5.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

The student attempts a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, demonstrating some control over structure. However, frequent grammatical errors occur throughout the text, including subject-verb agreement issues ('tourism is crucially playing the role', 'tourism... are now at the highest rank'), article misuse ('by tourism', 'at government level'), and awkward clause structures ('While, I believe that the if damage caused by the foreigner...'). Punctuation is also inconsistent. While these errors do not completely obscure the writer's meaning, they cause noticeable difficulty for the reader and prevent the response from achieving a higher band, placing it firmly at Band 5.0.

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