Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · IELTS Summit Mastery · 2026-09-22

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Tourism is one of the fastest growing industries and contributes a great deal to economies around the world. However, the damage tourism can cause to local cultures and the environment is often ignored.

To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

Tourism is one of the fastest growing industries and it also damage the local culture but i goes to tourism.Because its helpfull in generating the great revenue.People of todays feel very pleasent to explore the world due to latest inovations in technology.They travel from one country to another country in few hours but in past it was not possible.The tourism countries are more succesfull now.For example if we talk about the UAE its work on the tourist attraction instead of relay on only oil reserves.UAE is the world most powerfull country in tourist attraction.Businuss man of todays spend their money in UAE and invest in it.If we goes to local culture it is also the part of tourism in some cases because the world full of people of different intrests.Some people want to explore the historical places and some wants to visit the futuristic places.I think every country have to improve their tourisms.Every country have their own speciality.for example China is famous for businuss knowledge,Pakistan,India,Swizerland or etc are dominent for their natural beauty.On the other hand their are some negative point views including Enviromental damage.The tourist cause of dirty environment that cause the global warming and its hurt the seasons such as more temprate in summer and very low temprature in winter.But the mainly its contain benefits for world and entertain the busy life of people.Especially those who are stress full due to their personal life and have the much burden of work on them.Going to another place and relaxing are very relaxing and benficial for both mental and physical health.

So,if i some up tourism consist of more benfits then the disadvantages.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0

The response attempts to address the prompt regarding the economic benefits of tourism versus the damage it causes to local cultures and the environment. A position is discernible, arguing that tourism provides more benefits than disadvantages due to revenue generation and stress relief. However, the ideas are often underdeveloped, repetitive, and lack sufficient extension. For instance, the mention of the UAE and China touches upon relevant examples, but the explanations are brief and somewhat disjointed. The conclusion clearly states the writer's stance, but overall, the task response suffers from a lack of depth and clear organisation of arguments, aligning closely with the Band 5 descriptors.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0

The text demonstrates some organisation, but there is no clear overall progression of ideas. Paragraphing is extremely problematic, with nearly the entire essay lumped into one massive block of text, making it difficult to follow the logical flow. Cohesive devices are either missing, inadequate, or repetitive, such as the frequent use of 'and', 'because', and 'for example'. Reference words are sometimes unclear, as seen in phrases like 'if we goes to local culture'. While ideas are somewhat connected, the lack of appropriate paragraph breaks and mechanical use of cohesive ties prevent the response from achieving a higher band, placing it firmly at Band 4.0.

Lexical Resource — Band 4.0

The vocabulary used is basic and repetitive, with frequent errors in word choice and spelling, such as 'inovations', 'succesfull', 'Businuss', 'tourisms', 'enviromental', 'temprate', and 'stress full'. There is a limited range of vocabulary adequate for very basic communication, but noticeable errors cause some difficulty for the reader. While the writer attempts some less common words like 'revenue', 'reserves', and 'futuristic', they are often overshadowed by pervasive lexical inaccuracies and incorrect collocations, such as 'relay on only oil reserves' instead of 'rely only on oil reserves'. This performance reflects the Band 4 descriptors.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0

The student uses a very limited range of structures, relying mostly on simple sentences joined by basic conjunctions. Attempts at complex sentences are frequently faulty, leading to severe grammatical errors and non-standard syntax, such as 'i goes to tourism', 'its helpfull', 'every country have to improve', and 'if i some up tourism consist of more benfits'. Punctuation and capitalization are also poorly handled throughout the text, with lowercase 'i' used independently and missing spaces after periods. These frequent errors cause considerable difficulty for the reader and distort meaning at times, corresponding to a Band 4.0 score.

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