Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · IELTS Summit Mastery · 2026-10-05

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Tourism is one of the fastest growing industries and contributes a great deal to economies around the world. However, the damage tourism can cause to local cultures and the environment is often ignored.

To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

first of all, tourist means those people who

go outsiders from one place to another place .there has two type of tourist oneis national and another is international . people go one place to another ,for job, education, employment,to visit.

Tourism plays the significant role helps to surge the big deals about indrustial and economical around the world.i fully agree with this statement because tourism creates a different kind of job or business in destination country .

firstly,when tourist cut the ticket from Thier country to their destination country they have to pay money with includes the vat rate .its straightly go to the account of government.its help to economical .when visitiors come to the our country definitely they need basic things such as water,foods, transportation cost , clothing cost ,plus add stay place cost .this all activities help grow up the financial sourch to business man ,government .

on the other hand,there is also a disadvantage of welcome to tourist because there is no everyone is honest and clean heart ,they go to our historical place where has we have save our historical things , weapons do on.if they get chance to buy or click pictures of them one day definitely they wiil copied the design and next time,i not sure they wiil replace it or buy it silently in vadt amount ,one also harmful side is isin the airport place if secretary don't check their medical report we would have to face different kind of desease so we should medical check conpulsory.tour

we should save our culture , traditional and custom it helps to attract the tourists.

In conclusion, tourism and and the remetance also one of the strong part of the income and its play main role to economical .

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

The response addresses the task partially. While the writer manages to express a clear position of full agreement regarding the economic benefits of tourism, the development of ideas is limited. The discussion regarding the positive economic impacts mentions taxes and basic needs, but these points remain under-developed and are expressed in a repetitive manner. Similarly, the counterargument concerning cultural damage and health risks is introduced, but it lacks sufficient elaboration and relevant examples, remaining too general to fully explore the prompt's complexities.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

There is some basic organisation with attempts at paragraphing, but the text lacks a clear overall progression. Cohesive devices are frequently inadequate, inaccurate, or overused, such as the repetitive use of 'firstly', 'on the other hand', and 'in conclusion' in ways that feel mechanical rather than naturally guiding the reader. Referencing is sometimes unclear, particularly with pronoun use like 'they' and 'it', which occasionally creates confusion regarding whether the writer is referring to tourists, governments, or local businesses.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

The vocabulary range is limited and minimally adequate for expressing basic thoughts on the topic. There are noticeable errors in word choice and word formation, such as 'sourch' for source, 'indrustial' for industrial, and 'vadt' for vast, which reflect instability in spelling and collocation. Phrasing such as 'cut the ticket' or 'clean heart' sounds unnatural and causes some difficulty for the reader in grasping the precise meaning intended.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The student uses a limited range of structures, relying mostly on simple sentences, while attempts at more complex structures are frequently faulty. There are persistent errors across sentence boundaries, verb forms, and articles, such as missing subjects, incorrect subject-verb agreement in clauses like 'there has two type', and flawed prepositions. These frequent grammatical errors disrupt the flow of reading and can cause difficulty for the reader in parsing the intended meaning.

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