Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · IELTS Summit Mastery · 2026-10-05

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Tourism is one of the fastest growing industries and contributes a great deal to economies around the world. However, the damage tourism can cause to local cultures and the environment is often ignored.

To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 4.0)

The travel industry is one of the Swiftest-growing sector often contributes a great way to economies around the globe.in contrast the damage tourism can put on local cultures and as well as environment is often rejected. I fully agree with this term and reasons for stating such will be eloquently elaborated in upcoming paragraphs.

Firstly. Tourism is spreading wider aand wider in every part of the world

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 3.0

The length requirement is not met, as the response is only sixty-seven words, falling far short of the two hundred and fifty-word minimum. Because of this severe under-length, the task is addressed only partially, presenting an incomplete introduction and an abruptly cut-off first body point that barely begins before stopping entirely. While the writer attempts to introduce a clear position stating full agreement with the prompt regarding tourism's damage to local cultures and the environment, the ideas remain severely limited and under-developed due to the lack of content and unfinished paragraphs. To move up to a higher band, the student must write a complete essay that fully explores both aspects of the prompt with extended, well-supported arguments and relevant examples.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

There is some basic organisation evident through the opening introductory framing, and cohesive markers such as 'in contrast' are attempted to connect ideas. However, there is no clear overall progression because the text breaks off mid-sentence after only a few lines, leaving the structure fundamentally incomplete. Paragraphing is attempted, but the second paragraph is left as an isolated fragment consisting of a single incomplete sentence 'Firstly. Tourism is spreading wider aand wider in every part of the world'. To achieve a higher band, the writer must ensure logical sequencing across multiple fully developed paragraphs, using cohesive devices smoothly without mechanical errors and maintaining clear referencing throughout a complete essay.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

The vocabulary range is limited and minimally adequate for basic communication, featuring repetitive or overly simplistic structures. The student attempts some less common vocabulary items such as 'eloquently elaborated', but these show noticeable errors in word choice and collocation. Additionally, there are spelling and word-form errors present throughout the brief text, such as 'Swiftest-growing sector often contributes', 'aand wider', and 'rejected' used where 'neglected' or 'ignored' was likely intended. These errors cause some difficulty for the reader. To improve lexical resource, the writer needs to expand their vocabulary range, use precise word choices that fit the academic context naturally, and check spelling carefully.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The grammatical range is extremely limited, consisting of basic sentence structures combined with faulty attempts at complex sentences. There are frequent errors in grammar, punctuation, and article usage that impede communication, such as missing subjects or run-on phrasing like 'global.in contrast'. Punctuation is also handled poorly, notably with the stray full stop in 'Firstly. Tourism' and erratic capitalisation like 'in contrast'. To reach a higher band, the student must demonstrate a proper mix of simple and complex sentence forms with significantly fewer grammatical errors, ensuring that punctuation, verb tenses, and sentence boundaries are controlled accurately.

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