Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · IELTS Summit Mastery · 2026-10-08

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Tourism is one of the fastest growing industries and contributes a great deal to economies around the world. However, the damage tourism can cause to local cultures and the environment is often ignored.

To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

Tourism is one of the fastest growing industries and contributes a great deal to economies around the world. However, the damage tourism can cause to local cultures and the environment is often ignored. I also agree with it that tourism is effecting our local cultures and environment with their different thinking habit and influencing culture which is being ignored by us.

In these days, where some countries are properly dependent on tourism because of low resources although the cause of tourism are also visible. The cultural difference between tourism and locals influance the local people toward the foreign culture. For example,today many countries are leaving there cultural drassing and shifting toward the pants and shirts.

One an other reason is that the locals donot have a believe on their cutures and the fill uncomfortable in his cutures and traditions. To solve it they want to be pride on ther clture and dont fill disgrass in their cultural dresses and visuals.As like muslims the donot disgrass in wearing a simple an traditional cloths also the perform their rituals with out any hasitation and with their full believe.

In conclusion, every person should want to protect there culture and tradition with out influencing with others.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0

Your response takes a position, agreeing that tourism can harm local culture, and gives relevant examples such as people adopting foreign clothing and Muslims maintaining traditional dress and rituals. However, the task asks about damage to both local cultures and the environment, and the environmental aspect is not developed at all. The cultural points are also brief and sometimes unclear, with little explanation of how tourism causes the changes or what consequences follow. The conclusion repeats a general call to protect culture rather than fully answering the extent of your agreement. The response is 170 words, below the 250-word minimum; the 33 words copied from the prompt do not count. Develop both parts of the issue and support your position with fuller examples.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

There is a basic overall structure: an introduction, two body paragraphs and a conclusion. The ideas are grouped broadly by topic, and phrases such as “For example” and “One another reason” attempt to guide the reader. However, progression is difficult to follow in places. The opening of the second paragraph combines dependence on tourism with its causes without making the relationship clear, and the next paragraph shifts from cultural influence to local people’s confidence in their traditions. Some links are also awkward or unclear, including “To solve it” and “As like Muslims.” Use topic sentences that state each paragraph’s main point, then explain and illustrate it in a clear sequence. More precise referencing and transitions would make the argument easier to follow.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You use some topic-related vocabulary, including “tourism,” “cultural difference,” “traditions,” “foreign culture” and “rituals,” so the reader can identify the general subject. However, the range is basic and several inaccurate word choices or spellings make meaning difficult to interpret. For example, “influance the local people toward” is not a natural way to describe cultural influence, while “disgrass” appears to mean “feel ashamed” or “disrespect,” depending on the intended meaning. There are also repeated spelling errors such as “there” for “their,” “cutures,” and “drassing.” Build a more precise vocabulary for environmental impacts as well as cultural change, and check spelling and collocations carefully.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You attempt both simple and longer sentence forms, including a subordinate clause beginning “where some countries…” and a reason introduced by “because.” However, control is inconsistent, and errors frequently make the intended relationships unclear. For example, “I also agree with it that tourism is effecting…” has an awkward clause structure, while “the locals donot have a believe…and the fill uncomfortable” contains problems with articles, verb forms and agreement. The sentence beginning “As like Muslims” is also difficult to parse, and several sentences run together without reliable punctuation. Practise building accurate subject–verb sentences first, then add one clear subordinate clause at a time. Check articles, pronouns, verb forms and sentence boundaries during revision.

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