Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · IELTS Summit Mastery · 2026-10-08

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Tourism is one of the fastest growing industries and contributes a great deal to economies around the world. However, the damage tourism can cause to local cultures and the environment is often ignored.

To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

Nowadays, tourism plays a major role in developing nations; it belived that tourism is one of the fastest growing industries and it contributes a grreat deal to economies around the world,but on the other hand, damage tourism can cause to local cultures and the environment is often ignored; here, to a major extent agree with this and it will be discussed in this essay with relevant arguments and pragmatic examples in support.

As far as tourism is concerned, in currunt times many people have fond of travelling and they really exited to know about different culture, tradition, food, as well as language, because it helps to improve their knowladge and it offerce happyness,but sometimes, it creates lot of wast because of over population, like it can pollute beaches, mountains and local area. Not only this but also, it damages nation beauity because of overcrowding like if international traveler come then they need to find shelter and native peope cut tree and build more hotrel and resturant because it offeres stable incomebut itr can destroy natural p[laces.

On the otherhand, tourism effects on local culture and tradition because young generation like to follow modern lifestyle instead od traditional culture. It is worth noting that traditional food, clothes, and many fastives preserve our cultute and it helps to present tradition and many local native use it for earning money'

To conclude, bothe have own benefits but tourism creates a lotr of pollution and it effects on nations beauty . However, traditional food, culture and language is best way to earn money for native people.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You take a position that you agree to a major extent and address both environmental damage and effects on culture. Examples such as pollution on beaches and pressure to build hotels are relevant, and you also mention tourism’s economic value. However, the discussion is only partially developed: the cultural point about young people adopting modern lifestyles is not explained with a specific example, and the conclusion does not clearly restate how far you agree. The response is 240 words, so it is 10 words below the required minimum; this limits the space available to develop your reasons. To strengthen the response, explain each main effect and connect it directly to your stated position.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The response has a recognisable essay structure, with an introduction, two body paragraphs and a conclusion. The paragraphs also broadly separate environmental effects from cultural effects. However, progression within the paragraphs is sometimes difficult to follow: the first body paragraph moves from visitors’ interest in other cultures to pollution and construction without clear links between these points. Connectors such as “Not only this but also” and “On the otherhand” are used mechanically or inaccurately, while the conclusion introduces benefits without clearly summarising the argument. Use clearer topic sentences, develop one central idea at a time, and make references such as “it” and “this” explicit.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You attempt topic-related vocabulary, including “overcrowding,” “traditional lifestyle,” “pollute,” and “stable income,” which helps communicate the main subject. However, the range is limited and many spelling and word-choice errors make the writing less clear, for example “grreat,” “currunt,” “knowladge,” “beauity,” and “cultute.” Some combinations are also unnatural, such as “tourism effects on local culture” and “creates lot of wast.” These errors sometimes require the reader to work out the intended meaning. Build accuracy with common collocations for tourism and environmental impact, and check spelling and word forms carefully. More precise vocabulary would help distinguish economic benefits from cultural and environmental costs.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt some longer sentences and use clauses with “because,” “if,” and “although”-type contrast, showing an effort to express relationships between ideas. However, the range is limited, and complex sentences are often faulty. For example, “it belived that tourism is” lacks a clear grammatical subject and correct verb form, while “many people have fond of travelling” has an incorrect verb pattern. Agreement and articles are also inconsistent, as in “traditional food, culture and language is” and “it creates lot of wast.” Punctuation is unreliable, particularly where several clauses are joined with commas. Practise accurate simple sentences first, then build longer sentences with correct subjects, verbs, articles and clause boundaries.

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