Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · IELTS Summit Mastery · 2026-10-16

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Tourism is one of the fastest growing industries and contributes a great deal to economies around the world. However, the damage tourism can cause to local cultures and the environment is often ignored.

To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

In recent years, tourism is growing fast around the world. There are several reasons that illustrate the growth of tourism.From my perspective it is beneficial for all the countries. I will explain all the majior effects of growing tourists.

Firstly, I strongly agree that tourism contributes the great deal to economic around all over the world. A good example of this is the economic growrth, moreover people who want to secure their future with handsom income they move from one country to other. They found jobs and work hard for their desire goals. They provide a lot of benefits to the buisness owner and this is advantageous for this country's economic growth. Other than that a large number of visitors come from different countries to visits and this is also beneficial for economies.

Secondly, they damaged their culture and environment. The main and common reason is that visitors did not follow the rules and regulations of the countries. Travelers can damage their beauty. Most of the time countries did not allow the visitors to come their country because they afraid about their tradional environment so, this is also damage their economical growth.

In opinion, I explain the value of tourists they are not only damaging any kind of cultures but also a part of growing economical health.A wealthy country become a successful country in future. Visitors make the country successful with good income support. In this essay both opinions are true but i think wealth and growng income is not forgettable.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

You express a general view that tourism’s economic benefits outweigh its cultural and environmental harm, and you mention both sides of the issue. However, the position is not consistently clear: the opening calls tourism beneficial, the second body paragraph says visitors damage culture and the environment, and the conclusion says both views are true without clearly explaining the extent of your agreement. Ideas are also limited and under-developed. For example, you say tourism creates jobs and supports businesses, but do not give a specific example or explain how this benefit compares with cultural or environmental costs. Develop a clear, direct position and support each main point with a relevant example and explanation to address the question more fully.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

Your response has an introduction, two body paragraphs and a conclusion, and signposts such as “Firstly” and “Secondly” help identify the main sections. However, the overall progression is difficult to follow because the relationship between ideas is not always clear. The first body paragraph shifts from economic growth to workers moving abroad and then to visitors, without explaining how these points connect. The conclusion also repeats the economic-benefit argument rather than clearly resolving the comparison raised in the essay. Some linking phrases, including “Other than that” and “In opinion,” are awkward or do not show the intended relationship. Organise each paragraph around one main idea, then use clear references and transitions to show how the supporting explanation relates to it.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some relevant topic vocabulary, including “tourism,” “visitors,” “rules and regulations,” “culture,” “environment” and “economic growth.” This gives you a basic range for discussing the subject. However, the vocabulary is limited and several noticeable spelling, word-form and collocation errors make parts of the message harder to understand. Examples include “majior,” “growrth,” “buisness,” “tradional” and “growng,” as well as unnatural phrases such as “secure their future with handsom income” and “growing economical health.” Aim to learn accurate topic collocations and check spelling carefully. More precise expressions for tourism’s benefits and costs would help you explain your ideas clearly without repeating general terms such as “successful” and “beneficial.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple sentences and longer structures, including “A good example of this is…” and “The main and common reason is that…”. However, the range is limited, and attempts to connect several clauses often contain errors that can make the meaning difficult to follow. For instance, “tourism is growing fast” does not use the most suitable tense for a trend beginning in recent years, while “visitors come … to visits” has an incorrect verb form. There are also problems with articles, agreement and sentence boundaries, as in “a large number of visitors … to visits” and “A wealthy country become.” Practise accurate present and past forms, subject–verb agreement, and complete sentence construction before adding more complex clauses.

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