Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · IELTS Summit Mastery · 2026-10-16

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Tourism is one of the fastest growing industries and contributes a great deal to economies around the world. However, the damage tourism can cause to local cultures and the environment is often ignored.

To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 4.0)

In my state of mind. Tourism is so important in your life. because tour refresh your mind and start good memories in your lifes.

In 2021 I personly experience Naran with my whole family. I enjoy a lot but some point I read no every one go holidays in one time. These persons they can not affort the tourism out of countries. These people enjoy holidays in our country My country nothern side is so good I go many times in my family and lot of memories with my czns.Explore culture and food .

In my openion tourism is so good feeling and time to enjoy your family and friends. My mind set I start my on setup for tour company. domistic level Faisalabad to Northern side. But My father said my hardels in this busniess. but my dream I create one tour these peoples they cannot affort this ejoyment and these child they cannot affort I sposerned this trip dor these individules.

yes in my country govt cannot permote tourism and effect the culture of my country. There are many advantages in tourism and many disadvantages the main disadvantage the govt is not serious for develop the tourism places and the culture and food and people of these places are affects.

on the conclusion tourism is good think and create good memories to generate your future so enjoy and plan atleast 1 trip in one year. plan trip ans enjoy your life. In the last good memories create your long life.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0

You express a generally positive view of tourism, supported by personal experience of visiting Naran and an aspiration to organise affordable trips. These examples show a relevant connection to tourism. However, the question specifically asks whether you agree that tourism’s harm to local cultures and the environment is often ignored. Your response only briefly mentions that the government is not serious about tourism development and that local culture and people are affected; it does not explain these harms or clearly state how far you agree. Much of the essay focuses instead on enjoying holidays and creating memories. To strengthen your response, state your position directly and develop relevant reasons, such as environmental pressure or changes to local customs, with specific examples.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 3.5

There is an attempt to organise the response into paragraphs, and phrases such as “In my opinion” and “on the conclusion” signal a viewpoint and ending. The personal account also gives the reader a basic sequence of ideas. However, the overall progression is difficult to follow: the essay moves from personal holidays to a tour-company plan, then to government and cultural effects, without clear links explaining how these points answer the question. Several sentences repeat the idea that tourism is enjoyable, while the central issue of harm is not developed. Build a clearer structure: introduction with your position, separate paragraphs for reasons and examples, and a conclusion that restates your answer. Use linking phrases to show relationships between ideas.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You use some topic-related vocabulary, including “tourism,” “culture,” “government,” “holidays,” and “memories,” and you attempt to express ideas about domestic travel and affordability. However, the range is basic and repetitive, with frequent spelling errors and inaccurate word choices that make parts of the message difficult to understand, such as “affort,” “hardels,” and “sposerned.” Some phrases are also unnatural, including “In my state of mind” and “good feeling.” Aim to learn accurate topic vocabulary and common collocations, then check spelling carefully. More precise terms such as “local communities,” “environmental damage,” and “tourism development” would help you discuss the task directly.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.0

The response relies mainly on short, simple statements, and there are attempts to connect ideas, for example, “There are many advantages in tourism and many disadvantages.” However, frequent errors in sentence formation, verb forms, agreement, articles, and punctuation sometimes distort meaning. Examples include “Tourism is so important in your life,” “because tour refresh your mind,” and “these peoples they cannot affort.” Sentence fragments such as “In my state of mind” and “Explore culture and food” also interrupt the flow. Practise forming complete sentences with a clear subject and verb, and check tense and agreement. For example, “Tourism refreshes the mind” is clearer than “tour refresh your mind.”

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