Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

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IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Tourism is one of the fastest growing industries and contributes a great deal to economies around the world. However, the damage tourism can cause to local cultures and the environment is often ignored.

To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 4.0)

Todays, tourism is one of the fastest growing industries and contibutes a great deal to economies around the world. However, the damage tourism can cause to local cukturess and the environment is often ignored. I strongaly agree with this idea because many humans was shows the out country dress and humans do not illustrate the local cultures dress than this time the damage tourism can cause to local cultures.

On the one resion, tourism are travling by many contryes but this place people are don not following local cultures dress, launguage, food they think that earn moneny and they are shows with fake cultures. Firstly, tourism is great but humans are many problems faces this time and this time humans are build by hotel and many fecilities are not completed by there, than mane water problem, internet problem many problems are this time face a humans.

secoundly, tourism was travling time they are eating junk foods and junk food rapers are heard by many places that reasion are highly pollustion problems. Furthermore, tourist had build a small houses than this time environment is most using and pollustion because tpurist are fire the forest and environment.

In counclusion, tourism is one of the fastest growing industries and co tributes a great deal to economies around the aorld. However, the damage tourism can cause to local cultures and the environment is often ignored.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 3.5

Your position is stated clearly in the introduction: “I strongly agree,” and you attempt to discuss effects on both local culture and the environment. The points about visitors not following local customs, pressure on facilities, litter and forest fires are relevant, but they are difficult to understand and are not explained with clear examples or consequences. The conclusion repeats the prompt rather than summarising your reasons. The response also contains 174 words, so it is 76 words below the required minimum; 57 copied words from the task prompt were not counted. This leaves the argument substantially incomplete. To strengthen it, explain each main point in full and add a specific example showing how tourism harms a community or natural area.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

The response has an introduction, two body paragraphs and a conclusion, and signposts such as “Firstly,” “Furthermore” and “In conclusion” show an attempt to organise the discussion. However, the ideas do not progress clearly within the paragraphs: the first body paragraph moves from cultural practices to hotels and internet access without explaining their connection, while the second combines litter, housing and forest fires. Some linking phrases are used mechanically, and unclear references such as “this time” make relationships between points hard to follow. The conclusion repeats the opening rather than drawing the argument together. Give each paragraph one main focus, order its supporting details logically, and use linking words only where they clarify the relationship.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.0

You attempt vocabulary relevant to the topic, including “local cultures,” “facilities,” “pollution” and “environment,” so the reader can identify the general subject. However, the range is basic and many spelling and word-choice errors make ideas difficult to interpret, for example “cukturess,” “strongaly,” “pollustion” and “fake cultures.” Several phrases are also unnatural or unclear, such as “tourism are travelling by many countries” and “tourist had build a small houses.” Build a reliable set of topic-specific expressions and check spelling carefully. More precise phrases such as “local customs,” “pressure on infrastructure,” and “damage to natural habitats” would help you express your points clearly and appropriately.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.0

You make an effort to form longer sentences and use clauses, including “I strongly agree with this idea because…” and “Furthermore, tourist had build…”. However, sentence structures are often incomplete or incorrectly formed, and errors frequently obscure the intended meaning. Examples include “tourism are travelling,” “many humans was shows,” and “tourist had build a small houses,” which show problems with subject–verb agreement, verb forms and singular/plural agreement. Some sentences also run several ideas together without clear grammatical connections. Practise accurate simple sentence patterns first, then combine them using because, while and which. Check that each sentence has a clear subject and verb, and review tense and agreement before finishing.

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