Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · IELTS Summit Mastery · 2026-10-17

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Tourism is one of the fastest growing industries and contributes a great deal to economies around the world. However, the damage tourism can cause to local cultures and the environment is often ignored.

To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 4.0)

"The topic disscussess the tourisms.There are many benefits of tourisms.Tourisms has many opportunities.For example:Many people are enjoying in river by sailing and boat.Now a days tourism plays a very important role in life.Many children and people were saw many beautiful things.There are a lot of people went to murree,islambad.These are very beautiful and colder places.For example:Tourisms enjoy many beautfil valley which present in Multan.Many tourists enjoys colder areas and enjoying heavily raining in islambad.Many people enjoying murree hills and cloud.There are a lot of clouds which looks very beautiful in Muree and islamabad.The weather and environment of Islambad is very beautfiful.Some people tour to London.Its a very amazing and beautiful city.Most of people saw effiel tower,Musems,Caffess and resturants there.Many people thought that the people of Islamabad,Murree and London looks very amazing.And their talking of way to other people are very polite.Some foreign people are meet with pakistani people's.The talking behaviour of forgiener people looks very pretty.Now a days a million of people went in london to saw many things.The cafes,resturants and hi tea around the world in islamabad,Murree and London look like very beautiful.Their traffic and cars looks very preety.And there are many resturants and parks are present in London city,Islamabad city and murree city.Many people feels to enjoy colder weather.They enjoy a lot of music.Morever they were enjoying a lot of clubs.Some children enjoys many swing-swang.But there are many disadvantages of tourism.Many high tourism sports like Long vehichles in the parks had not benefical to the children.The conclusion is that tourism is a very good place but there are many advantages and disadvantages."

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 3.5

The response recognises that tourism has both benefits and disadvantages, and it gives examples of places such as Murree, Islamabad and London. However, it does not answer the central question about whether you agree that tourism’s harm to local cultures and the environment is often ignored. Most of the essay describes scenery, weather, restaurants and activities, while the brief statement about disadvantages—“there are many disadvantages of tourism”—is not explained with a relevant example. The conclusion, “tourism is a very good place,” does not state a clear position on the issue. To improve, directly say how far you agree and develop reasons about environmental damage or effects on local culture, supporting each with a specific example.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 3.5

There is a basic attempt to organise the response: it begins with general comments about tourism, later introduces disadvantages, and ends with a conclusion. Some examples are grouped around destinations, which gives the reader a loose sense of topic. However, the essay is presented as one continuous paragraph, and ideas move abruptly between places, weather, people’s behaviour, restaurants and activities. Repeated openings such as “Many people” and “There are a lot of” do not show clear relationships between points. The contrast signalled by “But” is not followed by a developed discussion of harm. Use separate paragraphs for your position, supporting reasons and conclusion, and connect each example explicitly to the question.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.0

The response uses a basic range of topic-related words, including “tourism,” “environment,” “beautiful,” “weather” and “restaurants,” and it attempts to describe places and activities. However, vocabulary is highly repetitive, with “beautiful” and “many people” appearing repeatedly, and several choices are inaccurate or unclear, such as “tourism is a very good place” and “high tourism sports.” Spelling errors—including “disscussess,” “effiel,” “resturants” and “forgiener”—also reduce control. Build a more precise set of words for the task, such as “local communities,” “cultural traditions,” “pollution” and “damage to natural habitats.” Check spelling and choose expressions that accurately describe tourism’s effects rather than relying on general praise.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.0

The writing mainly uses short, simple statements and shows an attempt to form longer sentences with examples and conjunctions. However, control of basic sentence grammar is inconsistent, and errors often make the intended meaning difficult to follow. Examples include “Tourisms has many opportunities,” “Many children and people were saw many beautiful things,” and “Many tourists enjoys colder areas,” where subject–verb agreement and verb forms are faulty. Sentence construction is also problematic in “There are many resturants and parks are present,” which combines two structures incorrectly. Practise accurate simple sentences first, then add clauses using “because,” “while” or “which.” Pay particular attention to agreement, past-tense forms and avoiding duplicated verbs.

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