Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · IELTS Summit Mastery · 2026-10-22

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Tourism is one of the fastest growing industries and contributes a great deal to economies around the world. However, the damage tourism can cause to local cultures and the environment is often ignored.

To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

Tourism is one of the fastest incrasing industries and contributes a lot deal to economies around the world . I completely agree , the afeected tourism can harm to local cultures and the environment is often ignored.

Tourism and hospitality management is the vital part of our industries its help to great GDP growth and impact our scoiety across the world.In the contrary, most of the tourists are came from abroad they are need to better service throughout tourisom sector . For example, Cox's Bazar is the most elementary tourist place in Bangladesh but day by day this place destroy beauty and atmosphere only for ignored the environment .On the one hand, Economies are developing tourist sector near about 10.24% gobally impact in aorund the country.

On the other hand, Tourism sector are responsible for damage the environment such as regional resources ,culture and environment while they are increasing business growth rather than safe environment .For example , tup tup resturent are firing and also damage the environment only for business issues they are not taking care of environment and cultures .

In my opinion ,Tourism and hospitality management is tha valuebale part of our countries so that government should take initiate to protect local resources and culture .However, the damage of tourism sector can cause harm to regional cultures and environment is often ignored.

In conclusion, Tourim is the most growing industries and contributes a lot deat to economic sector over the world .But it is responsible for tourist they are damage local resources and environment.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

You take a clear position in the opening, saying “I completely agree,” and the response stays broadly focused on tourism’s effects on the environment and local culture. The Cox’s Bazar example is relevant, and you mention the tension between economic growth and environmental protection. However, the reasons are only briefly stated and are not clearly explained; the reference to a 10.24% economic impact is not connected to a developed argument, and the restaurant example is difficult to interpret. The conclusion repeats the main claim rather than drawing the discussion together. The response also falls two words short of the 250-word minimum; the nine words copied from the task prompt are excluded from the count. Develop each main point with a clear explanation and a specific, relevant example.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The response has a recognisable structure: an introduction, two body paragraphs presenting contrasting points, and a conclusion. This gives the reader some sense of organisation, and signposts such as “On the one hand” and “On the other hand” indicate a contrast. However, progression within paragraphs is often unclear: the economic statistic appears without explanation, and the relationship between tourism, restaurant fires, and cultural damage is hard to follow. Some linking phrases are inaccurate or mechanical, including “In the contrary,” while repeated references to tourism and environmental harm do not build the argument forward. Use one central idea per paragraph, connect each example explicitly to that idea, and choose linking expressions that accurately show the relationship between points.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You attempt vocabulary relevant to the topic, including “economies,” “hospitality management,” “GDP growth,” “regional resources,” and “local cultures.” These choices show an effort to discuss both economic and environmental impacts. However, the range is limited and several spelling, word-form, and collocation errors make parts of the message difficult to understand, such as “incrasing,” “a lot deal,” “the afeected tourism,” and “Tourim.” Some phrases are also imprecise, including “elementary tourist place” and “safe environment.” Aim for accurate, natural combinations rather than more complicated wording: for example, describe Cox’s Bazar as a “popular tourist destination” and say that tourism can “damage the natural environment.” Proofread spelling and check unfamiliar phrases before using them.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple statements and longer sentences, and the response uses some subordination, as in “while they are increasing business growth.” However, the range is limited, and errors occur frequently in sentence structure, verb forms, agreement, articles, and punctuation. For example, “Tourism and hospitality management is the vital part of our industries its help to great GDP growth” joins clauses without correct punctuation and has agreement and article problems. “Most of the tourists are came from abroad” also has an incorrect verb form. These errors sometimes make the intended meaning difficult to follow. Practise building accurate simple sentences first, then combine them with one clear subordinate clause. Check subject–verb agreement, past and present verb forms, and sentence boundaries during proofreading.

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