Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · IELTS Summit Mastery · 2026-10-27

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Tourism is one of the fastest growing industries and contributes a great deal to economies around the world. However, the damage tourism can cause to local cultures and the environment is often ignored.

To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 4.0)

Tourism is one of the fastest growing industries and contributes a great deal to economies around the world however the damage tourism can cause to local cultures and the environment is often ignored.If tourism are growing in the world so country is economy are fastest grow because tourism are coming in the county and the invest in the county.today is social media on the platform a lot of people are search in the county who is the most visited and beautiful so people are going into country and invest so economy are grow and invester are coming so country industries are grow economies.Public transport are modern and increased in the country.where people are go so it is famous for cultures and the beauty in this area and most county to aggrement and deal for invest so country are most increased economies .However tourism are not go to country for tour and so it is not grown the economy because most invester are threat in this country and not coming .It is threat of terrisom and public transport are not good and not natural scenery so tourism are not coming and country are not grown the economies and invester are not invest in the country.So environment and culture are not own in the world damage economies so i agreed this because if tourism are coming in the country and grown the economy. the tourism are coming in country so it safe because terisom is not so it is own the environment and cultures and grown the economy and great dealing for invest in the world.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 3.0

The response attempts to discuss tourism’s economic benefits and its possible effects on culture and the environment, and it ends with a position: “i agreed this.” However, the position is difficult to interpret because the essay mainly argues that tourism helps economies and does not clearly explain whether you agree that its damage is ignored. The environmental and cultural effects named in the prompt are not developed with reasons or examples; instead, the discussion shifts to investment, transport, and terrorism. The response is also 18 words below the 250-word minimum; 33 words copied from the task prompt were not counted. To improve, state your degree of agreement clearly, address both the benefits and the alleged damage, and support each main point with a relevant example.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 3.5

There is a basic attempt to connect ideas, using words such as “however,” “because,” and “so,” and the response moves from tourism’s economic effects to a concluding statement. However, it is presented as one long block, with no clear paragraphing to separate the position, supporting points, and conclusion. The progression is also hard to follow: the discussion moves from social media and investment to public transport, then terrorism, without explaining how these points relate to the question. Repeated use of “so” and unclear references such as “this country” make connections mechanical or uncertain. Use separate paragraphs and organise each around one clear point, with linking phrases that show the relationship between ideas.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

The response uses some relevant topic vocabulary, including “tourism,” “economy,” “investment,” “public transport,” “environment,” and “cultures,” so the general subject can be recognised. However, the range is repetitive and several word choices or forms make meaning unclear, such as “the invest in the county,” “most county to aggrement,” and “it safe because terisom is not.” Spelling errors including “investers,” “terrisom,” and “aggrement” also reduce clarity. Aim for accurate, natural collocations and avoid repeating “grow” and “country” so often. For example, describe how tourism “generates income” or “creates employment,” and refer specifically to “local traditions” or “environmental damage.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The response attempts to form longer sentences with reasons and subordinate clauses, for example, “if tourism are coming in the country and grown the economy,” but control is limited. Errors in subject–verb agreement and verb forms occur repeatedly: “tourism are growing,” “economy are fastest grow,” and “the invester are not invest.” Articles, plurals, and sentence boundaries are also often inaccurate, while several sentences run together without clear punctuation. These patterns make relationships between ideas difficult to understand. Practise building accurate simple sentences first, then combine them using “because,” “although,” or “if.” Check that each subject matches its verb and that each sentence has a clear beginning and end.

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