Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · IELTS Summit Mastery · 2026-10-28

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Tourism is one of the fastest growing industries and contributes a great deal to economies around the world. However, the damage tourism can cause to local cultures and the environment is often ignored.

To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 4.0)

tourism in the one of the fastest growing industies .they help to improve our economy tourism come our country to visit differnt places .go to shopping and visit the different resutrent .tourism come our country they contribute the small busniuss its help local people to get job and thy help the competion in market .

i greatly agree this satatement toueim help to grow the economy and help overall report our country in the wolrd the visiter show our vcountry how they beautiful people they respect the people . very kind and hospitality . the vistor show our people they are kindheart and behavior very kind with other people .

i want to tell the example about this tourism and of the famus person visit the our country . personly i meet the . and i ask the about our people and food .so they tell me he really enjoy the trip in his life most favourt trip in country .and they start the ouwn busniss to introdusce with our local people . beacuse the get the jo through this person . and tourism to visit the different places they take the mountains and different try food . really they like our food i think its helpful for our econmy and better improve the visiting places .

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 3.5

You mention relevant benefits of tourism, including jobs, small businesses, shopping and visitors’ interest in local food and places. However, the task asks whether you agree that tourism’s harm to local cultures and the environment is often ignored. Your statement, “i greatly agree,” is not clearly connected to that claim: most of the response describes positive effects, and you do not explain or give examples of cultural or environmental damage. The personal anecdote about meeting a visitor is also difficult to follow and does not sufficiently support your position. The response is below the required 250 words, so it does not meet the task’s length requirement. To improve, state your view on the harms directly and develop reasons and examples on both the benefits and costs of tourism.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

There is a basic attempt to organise the response into separate paragraphs, and the ideas about employment and a visitor’s experience provide some relevant content. However, the progression is difficult to follow: the opening lists tourism benefits, the next paragraph shifts to hospitality, and the final paragraph introduces an anecdote without clearly linking it to the question. Connections between sentences are often missing, while repeated references such as “tourism” and “they” do not always make clear who or what is meant. For example, the sequence about meeting a famous person and that person starting a business is hard to interpret. Use a clear introduction, one main idea per body paragraph, and a conclusion; connect each example explicitly to your argument.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You attempt vocabulary relevant to the topic, including “economy,” “local people,” “hospitality,” “mountains,” and “business.” These choices show some ability to discuss tourism and its effects. However, spelling errors and inaccurate or repetitive word choices frequently make the message harder to understand, as in “industies,” “resutrent,” “busniuss,” and “competion.” Phrases such as “improve our economy” and “better improve the visiting places” are also imprecise or unnatural in context. Build a reliable set of topic vocabulary and check spelling, word forms, and collocations. For instance, distinguish between “tourists,” the visitors, and “tourism,” the industry, and use precise terms for environmental and cultural impacts.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You make an effort to express several connected ideas, and some basic sentence patterns are recognisable. However, sentence boundaries and grammatical relationships are often unclear, as in “tourism come our country to visit differnt places .go to shopping,” where the subject and verbs are not formed into a complete, controlled sentence. There are recurring problems with verb forms and agreement (“tourism come,” “they contribute”), articles, and sentence punctuation. The anecdote also shifts between past and present forms, making its sequence difficult to follow. Practise building accurate simple sentences first, then join them with conjunctions such as “because” and “although.” Check that each sentence has a clear subject and correctly formed verb.

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