Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · IELTS Summit Mastery · 2026-10-30

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Tourism is one of the fastest growing industries and contributes a great deal to economies around the world. However, the damage tourism can cause to local cultures and the environment is often ignored.

To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

In todays world, toursim is playing a crucial role in every country's economy. Toursim industry had been grown rapidly in last few years and generating a vast number in revenue. Meanwhile it also damaging the nature and local culture and enviorment. I strong agree with it. In the essay we will dicuss the causes.

On this hand, toursim provide people changes to generate income from it especially to those people who live there so they can make up their living and afford,education, healthcare, and improve infrastructure so people will attract to their place and visits more.For exmaple, in my country people often visit northern side.It can be long or short tour but they spend money to visit those places and with that people of northern side they build different kind of hostels for tourists and for their stays. They runs their shops and restaurants which are totaly depends on tourists and toursim.

On the other hand, there are numerous advantages of toursim that people throw away their wastage which can cause to pollution. Mostly tourist used their cars for transportation and the smoke of their cars can lead to air pollution. Few time tourist misbehave to locals and interrupt in their culture and creat disturbance. For instance, tourist listen loud music which is totally inapropriate for local people and also for enviroment.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

You take a position by saying, “I strong agree,” and include relevant points about tourism income, pollution, and disruption to local customs. The examples of northern communities building hostels and tourists playing loud music help connect your ideas to the topic. However, the response addresses the issue only partially: the opening promises to discuss “the causes,” rather than explaining the extent of your agreement, and the body gives limited development of the environmental and cultural harms. The economic benefits are also not clearly weighed against the damage. The response is 28 words below the required minimum, which limits the space available to develop your argument. State your position precisely and extend each main point with explanation and a relevant example.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

Your response has an introduction followed by two body paragraphs, and “On the other hand” signals a contrast between economic benefits and tourism’s harms. This gives the reader a basic sense of the intended structure. However, the progression is not consistently clear: “On this hand” is an unclear transition, and the introduction says the essay will discuss causes, although the paragraphs mainly present benefits and disadvantages. Several ideas are crowded together, particularly in the first body paragraph, where income, education, healthcare, infrastructure, and visitor numbers appear in one long sequence. Use a clear topic sentence for each paragraph, then explain one central idea at a time. More precise linking and clearer references would make the argument easier to follow.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some relevant topic vocabulary, including “revenue,” “infrastructure,” “air pollution,” and “local culture,” so the reader can understand the main subject and examples. However, the range is limited and several word choices or collocations are inaccurate or repetitive, such as “generate income from it,” “throw away their wastage,” and “interrupt in their culture.” Spelling errors—including “toursim,” “enviorment,” and “inapropriate”—also make the writing less clear and polished. Aim to use more precise phrases for tourism’s economic benefits and its environmental or cultural effects, and proofread carefully for spelling. The suggestions below offer alternatives that fit the essay’s topic more naturally.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt some longer sentences, for example, the sentence beginning “On this hand,” which tries to connect tourism income with improvements to local living standards. However, the range of sentence structures is limited, and errors are frequent enough to make parts of the response difficult to read. Examples include “Toursim industry had been grown” and “They runs their shops,” where verb forms and subject–verb agreement are inaccurate. Articles and sentence boundaries also need attention, as in “in last few years” and the long sentence beginning “For exmaple, in my country.” Practise building accurate simple sentences first, then combine related ideas using clauses. Check verb forms, agreement, articles, and punctuation during revision.

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