Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · IELTS Summit Mastery · 2026-10-31

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Tourism is one of the fastest growing industries and contributes a great deal to economies around the world. However, the damage tourism can cause to local cultures and the environment is often ignored.

To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

many people agree that tourism is one of most growing industries, it brings countries thousands of dollars yearly, but some people came to the conclusion that tourism is a two edged swords because it can be the main reason for damanging the sites, i. strongly agree with this statement.

historical sites and artifacts can be ruined by over crowding of tourist, that they for some cases accidently break statues displayed outside for example alot of statues in japan were covered by a big glass box because a tourist pushed it and it broke. it brings damage to the country and also by ruining such valiable pieces left yesrs and years ago. drawing and writing on artifacts can also be a negative aspect of tourism like what happened in tassilli najjer in the south of algeria, some tourists drew over million years old drawing which made those arts ruined.

littering is also very known. its common to see trash threwn on historical sites like plastic bottles food waste they bought from the local sellers around these famous places and its mainly because of lack of trash bins and lack of respect by some tourists towards these places and not knowing that ruining these sacred places has big effects on history and maybe one small trash can cause that ur kids wont be able to see them

in conclusion, tourism can be benifical for some countries efonomics but its also very harmful towards old sites and meaningful places.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You take a clear position in the opening—“I strongly agree”—and give relevant examples of damage to heritage sites and littering. The examples from Japan and Tassili n’Ajjer help connect your argument to real places. However, the response addresses the task only partially: it focuses almost entirely on damage to historical sites and does not explain the effects of tourism on local cultures or the environment more broadly. Several points are asserted rather than developed; for instance, the littering paragraph mentions a lack of bins and respect but does not explain wider consequences or offer a fully clear example. The conclusion briefly acknowledges economic benefits but does not weigh them against the harms. The response is also four words below the required minimum. Develop both sides of the issue and explain each example more fully.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a recognisable structure: an introduction, two body paragraphs and a conclusion. Each body paragraph has a central focus—damage to artefacts and littering—so the reader can follow the main line of argument. However, progression between ideas is limited, and some sentences run together, particularly in the opening, where several points are joined by commas. Linking phrases such as “for example” and “in conclusion” are present, but connections within paragraphs are sometimes unclear; the sentence beginning “that they for some cases accidently break statues” does not clearly attach to the preceding idea. The final paragraph also introduces economic benefits without developing that contrast. Use clearer sentence boundaries and organise each paragraph around a claim, explanation and example.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use some topic-relevant vocabulary, including “historical sites,” “artifacts,” “over crowding,” “littering” and “local sellers,” which makes the subject clear. There are also attempts at more specific language, such as “million years old drawing.” However, the range is limited and several inaccurate or informal choices make the writing less precise: “two edged swords,” “threwn,” “big effects” and “meaningful places” do not express the ideas naturally. Spelling errors such as “damanging,” “valiable,” “benifical” and “efonomics” are noticeable and can distract the reader. Aim for accurate collocations and more precise terms—for example, describe the “adverse effects” on “heritage sites” and “local communities”—and check spelling carefully.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more extended sentences, including explanations and examples, but control is inconsistent. The opening is a comma splice: “many people agree … yearly, but some people came to the conclusion…”; the next sentence also begins with the fragment-like “i. strongly agree.” Other errors include missing articles and plural forms in “one of most growing industries” and “over crowding of tourist,” as well as unclear sentence construction in “that they for some cases accidently break statues.” Punctuation and capitalisation are also unreliable, with sentence beginnings and place names often left lowercase. These errors sometimes make relationships between ideas difficult to follow. Practise separating independent clauses with full stops or conjunctions, and check articles, agreement and sentence completeness during revision.

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