Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · IELTS Summit Mastery · 2026-11-03

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Tourism is one of the fastest growing industries and contributes a great deal to economies around the world. However, the damage tourism can cause to local cultures and the environment is often ignored.

To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

nowadays it is most debated question among the people in all over the world. tourism is fastest growing industry and contributes a great deal of economics.

on the other hand,it is also damage the our local culture and enviroment.

In my prespective,i am totally agree with that its damage our culture and enviroment very badly

firstly,I am going to start with pollution due to tourist.

last week, we two friends were decided to visit the river sight to relax our mind and also spent some time with eachother and discuss our problems.

but when we reached,we were shocked,not because of the rush of the people althought, seeing the garbage,plastic cans,plastic bottles even pampers of the children were floating on the water of the river.

In addition, the people were enjoing without knowing this they are destroy the beauty of the river.

they did not had any concern about whatn they are doing with natural the beauty.

on the other hand,when we are talking about culture so,i would say that people wants money rather than shows their culture.

moreover,they are doing the things that are not present in their culture.they do,just because of money.

our culture will going to b vanish if people are doing these kind of things just for the attraction of the tourists.

however,goverment should take some action to stop this damage .

subsequantly,histroical places built by the goverment.

with the passage of time people are destroying them.

in conculsion,whereas our industry is growing on the other hand pur culture and enviroment also damage very rapidly.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

Your position is clear: you strongly agree that tourism can damage both the environment and local culture. The river visit gives a relevant, concrete example of pollution, and you also address cultural change and damage to historical places, so the response covers the main parts of the question. However, these points are not developed equally. The river example is vivid, but the cultural argument—such as people changing traditions for money—and the claim about historical sites are stated briefly without explaining how tourism causes the harm or giving a specific example. To strengthen the response, explain these links and support each main point with a clear example.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

There is a recognisable overall structure: an introduction, discussion of environmental and cultural effects, and a conclusion. The shift from pollution to culture is signalled by phrases such as “In addition” and “on the other hand.” However, progression within and between ideas is not consistently clear. The river anecdote takes up much of the environmental discussion, while the later points about culture, government action, and historical places are abrupt and loosely connected. Some linking phrases, including repeated uses of “on the other hand,” do not show the intended relationship clearly. Use separate, focused body paragraphs and connect each claim to its explanation or example; this would make the argument easier to follow.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some relevant topic vocabulary, including “pollution,” “garbage,” “plastic bottles,” “culture,” and “historical places,” which helps communicate the main concerns. However, the range is limited and several expressions are inaccurate or unnatural, sometimes making the meaning less clear. For example, “contributes a great deal of economics” does not express the intended economic benefit, and “river sight” is not the natural term for a place beside a river. Spelling errors such as “enviroment,” “prespective,” and “goverment” are also noticeable. Build a more precise set of phrases for tourism’s effects, and check spelling and collocations when editing.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple statements and longer sentences, including the account of your visit to the river. However, control of sentence structure and verb forms is inconsistent, and errors sometimes make the reader work to understand the message. Examples include “I am totally agree,” “we two friends were decided,” “they did not had,” and “our culture will going to b vanish.” Articles, agreement, and sentence boundaries also need attention, as in “it is also damage the our local culture” and the long sentence beginning “but when we reached.” Practise forming accurate present and past-tense sentences, then combine ideas with subordinate clauses only when the structure remains clear.

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