Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · IELTS Summit Mastery · 2026-11-04

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Tourism is one of the fastest growing industries and contributes a great deal to economies around the world. However, the damage tourism can cause to local cultures and the environment is often ignored.

To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

Now a days, touristry is becoming a common trend in this world and boost up the economic around the world. It ignored although, it may harm environment and public culture on large scale. From my point of view, i strongly agree by explaining from different perspectives.

On the one hand, touristry factories grow up at a very fast rate. In past five-years many individuals never pay heed to went and explore the different sights of the amazing places. However, it becomes like a trend. Everyone wants to go and adventure the lakes and nature of beauty. Furthermore, this trend becomes a big hand to increase the economic rate. As most of the natives never know the exact astonishing places of the other countries so, they consult the globetrotting industries. They recommended various sights according to their budget and interest. As a result, the economic rate increase on a large scale like if a country has different historical place along with the healthy environmental nature. Other country has not enough views to explore and that one native wants to go other country and analysed the culture, values and traditions. By aiming this, the currency exchange around the world and it may cause to raise the economic rate of visiting countries.

On the other hand, most of the crucial thing that is ignores by the local people and environmental managing organizations of the visiting counties. Many adventurer do not follow the instructions and damaged the attraction of the sights. Moreover, cause the pollutions like if they are exploring the sea sight, through the trash and plastic in the water, it may unfair for the aquatic organisms. In despite of, visitors came and give the reviews. Depend up on the statements other natives list out that place and exchange the culture .

To reiterate, it is good from all points if display the instructions with penalty. the people explore different destinations in their leisure or holiday time.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

Your position is clear in the introduction: “I strongly agree,” and you recognise both tourism’s economic benefits and its potential harm to culture and the environment. The discussion of currency exchange and pollution is relevant, and the example of rubbish affecting aquatic life helps illustrate environmental damage. However, the response only partly develops the task: the economic benefits receive much more explanation than the damage to local cultures, which is mentioned briefly through “culture, values and traditions” but not clearly explained. The conclusion also shifts towards recommending instructions and penalties rather than restating how far you agree. Develop the cultural impact with a specific example and connect each main point directly to your position.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The response has an introduction, two body paragraphs signalled by “On the one hand” and “On the other hand,” and a concluding sentence, so there is some recognisable organisation. However, the progression within paragraphs is often difficult to follow: the first body paragraph moves from travel becoming fashionable to travel agencies, historical places, and currency exchange without clearly linking each step. Connectors such as “Furthermore,” “As a result,” and “By aiming this” do not always show the intended relationship, and “On the other hand” introduces harms without a clear transition from the benefits. Some references, including “that one native” and “that place,” are unclear. Group related ideas and use simpler, more precise links between them.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You attempt topic-related vocabulary, including “currency exchange,” “historical place,” “aquatic organisms,” and “traditions,” which helps communicate the general subject. However, the range is limited by repeated or inaccurate expressions, and some word choices make meaning difficult to interpret. For example, “touristry factories” does not clearly describe tourism businesses, “a big hand to increase the economic rate” is an unnatural way to express an economic benefit, and “healthy environmental nature” is unclear. There are also spelling and word-form problems such as “pollutions” and “counties” where the context appears to require “countries.” Aim for accurate collocations and use a more precise range for describing economic benefits, environmental damage, and cultural change.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and longer sentences, including a conditional example beginning “if a country has different historical place,” but complex structures are often faulty and errors occur frequently enough to make some sentences hard to follow. Examples include “it ignored although” and “Many adventurer do not follow the instructions and damaged,” where the verb forms and sentence construction are not controlled. Agreement and articles are also inconsistent, as in “the economic rate increase” and “a country has different historical place.” Punctuation and capitalisation need attention too, particularly the lowercase “i” and the fragment-like opening “In despite of, visitors came and give the reviews.” Practise building accurate subject–verb–object sentences before adding subordinate clauses.

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