Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · IELTS Summit Mastery · 2026-11-05

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graphs below show the percentage of people holding full driving licences in Great Britain by age and sex.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Full car driving licence holders: by sex and age

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The graphs illustrate the percentage of people holding full driving licences in great Britain by age and sex.

The accounted for men is 35 driving licence is in the age 0f 17 to 20 from 1975/76 to 2006. It rise in the age of 21 t0 29 accounted for 75 in 1975/76 and in 2006 is 70. 30 to 39 accounted for 80 in the year of 1975/76 and in 85

40 to 49 accounted for 82 in the 1975/76 and in 2006 accounted for 85

50/59 accounted for 70 in 1975/76 and in thwe 2006 accounted for 95

60 to 69 accounted for 60 in 1975/76 and in 2006 accounted for 95

70 and iver in 1975/76 accounted for 35 and in 2006 aacounted for 70

women accounted for 35 in the age of 17 to 20 in 2006 and in 1975/76 is accounted for 20 to 21 to 29 acconted for 45 in 1975/76 and in 2006 65 /

30 to 39 accounted for 50 in 1975/76 and in 2006 accounted for 62

40 to 49 acconted for 35 in 1975/76 and inb 2006 accounted for 78

50 to 59 accounyted for 25 in 1975/76 and in 2006 accounted for 75

60 to 69 accounted for 15 in 1975/76 and 2006 accounted for 65

70 and over accounted for 5 and in 2006 accounted for 30

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

You cover both sexes and both time periods, and several broad comparisons are recognisable, including the rise among older women and the high licence-holding rates among middle-aged men in 2006. However, the response mainly lists age-group figures rather than selecting and summarising the most important features, and it has no clear overview. Some figures are also substantially inaccurate: for example, men aged 50–59 are reported as 70% and 95%, rather than about 76% and 92%; for women aged 21–29, the figures are given as 45% and 65%, rather than about 43% and 63%. Add an overview of the main patterns and check figures against the chart to make the report more accurate and complete.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

The response has a basic division between men and women, which helps readers identify the two groups being described. However, the information within each section is presented as a sequence of repetitive, loosely connected statements, with little comparison or clear progression. Phrases such as “accounted for” recur throughout, and the abrupt ending provides no concluding overview. Some sentence boundaries are also unclear, as in “30 to 39 accounted for 80 in the year of 1975/76 and in 85”. Organise the report into an introduction, an overview, and focused comparison paragraphs; use linking language to group similar trends rather than listing every age band in turn.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

Your vocabulary is sufficient to identify the main topic and categories, using terms such as “driving licences”, “age”, “men” and “women”. However, the range is basic and repetitive, especially the repeated use of “accounted for”, which is not a natural way to describe percentages in this context. There are also spelling errors, including “iver”, “thwe” and “acconted”, and some unclear expressions such as “The accounted for men”. These errors sometimes make the intended meaning harder to follow. Use a wider set of accurate chart-description phrases, such as “the proportion of licence holders stood at” or “the figure rose to”, and check spelling carefully.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The response attempts to report comparisons across two years, but most sentences follow the same simple pattern and there is little evidence of controlled complex sentence structures. Frequent problems with sentence formation and verb patterns affect clarity. For example, “The accounted for men is 35 driving licence” lacks a clear grammatical structure, while “in 2006 accounted for 85” is incomplete without a clear subject. Tense and article use are also inconsistent, as in “in the year of 1975/76”. Build complete sentences with a clear subject and verb, and practise comparison structures such as “The figure for men aged 40–49 was about 81% in 1975/76, compared with 89% in 2006.”

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