Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · IELTS Summit Mastery · 2026-11-09

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graphs below show the percentage of people holding full driving licences in Great Britain by age and sex.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Full car driving licence holders: by sex and age

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The graphs illustrates the proportion of people holding full driving permits in Great Britain by age and gender, while two gendre are shown in the diagram.

Overall, in the graph men and women proportion are shown in the table. The men's proportion is higher than the women's . The men's prportion is higher with the epriod of 70 and over and lowest with the timeframe of 17 to 20 and women's ration is higher in the period of 40 to 49.

The men's ration is higher in 2006 and lower in the period of 2006, ln contrast the women's ration is 70 in 1975 qnd over in 2006.IN the period of 60 to 69 men's higher proportion in 2006 and women's higher proportion in 2006.

Over the period the men's and women's percentages are incresed and decreased and in the period of 17 to 20 the men's percentage are simile

ar both years and womwn's are lower in 1975 and higher in 2006.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0

You identify the topic and make a broad comparison that men’s licence-holding rates were generally higher than women’s. However, the response reports very few accurate, meaningful features of the chart, so the task is addressed only minimally. The claim that men’s rate was highest among people aged 70 and over and lowest among 17–20-year-olds is inaccurate: in 2006, men’s peak was among 50–59-year-olds, while the lowest was among 17–20-year-olds; in 1975/76, the peak was among 40–49-year-olds. The statement that women’s rate was highest at 40–49 applies only to 2006, not both years. Give a clear overview of the main changes and support it with accurate comparisons across the two years and age groups.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

The response has separate paragraphs and attempts to use an overview followed by further comparisons. However, ideas are not arranged in a clear progression, and several sentences are difficult to follow because the comparisons are incomplete or contradictory. For example, “The men's ration is higher in 2006 and lower in the period of 2006” does not identify what is being compared, while the following sentence about women and “70 in 1975” is unclear. Repeated references to “the period” do not help readers track the age groups or years. Organise the report into a concise overview and paragraphs comparing men’s and women’s figures, and use clear links such as “by contrast” only when the relationship is explicit.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You use some relevant task vocabulary, including “proportion,” “percentage,” “age,” and “gender,” and you attempt to describe comparisons. However, the range is basic and repetitive, with “ration,” “period,” and “higher” used repeatedly or inaccurately. Several spelling errors, including “gendre,” “prportion,” “incresed,” and “womwn's,” make the report harder to read. Some expressions are also unsuitable for describing the chart: “full driving permits” is less precise than “full driving licences,” and “in the timeframe of 17 to 20” is awkward. Build a more accurate set of terms for age groups, rates, increases, and comparisons, and check spelling before submitting.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

There are attempts to form longer sentences and use contrast, as in “The men's proportion is higher than the women's,” but grammatical control is inconsistent and errors sometimes obscure the intended meaning. The opening, “The graphs illustrates,” has a subject–verb agreement error, and “men and women proportion are shown” has an incorrect plural construction. In “the men's and women's percentages are incresed and decreased,” the verb form is faulty and the meaning is unclear. Sentence boundaries and punctuation are also unreliable, particularly in the run-together “2006.IN” and “1975 qnd.” Use straightforward, complete sentences with accurate agreement and verb forms first, then add controlled comparisons using clauses such as “while” or “whereas.”

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