Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · IELTS Summit Mastery · 2026-11-11

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graphs below show the percentage of people holding full driving licences in Great Britain by age and sex.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Full car driving licence holders: by sex and age

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The bar graph illustrates the percentage of people holding full driving licences in great britain by age and sex .

Overall, it can be obseved that in 2006, the highest proportion of male from 30 to 50 who had driving licences and females had age of 30 to 49 years. However, both had at early age least driving licences.

Turning to the details it is evident that, in 1975 , there were a 40 percent of mens who had driving licences and in womens drecreased by 20 precent. Whereas, maximun propor

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 3.5

You identify the chart’s subject and attempt an overview, noting that licence ownership was highest among middle-aged people in 2006 and lower among the youngest groups. However, the overview is unclear and partly inaccurate: the lowest figures are generally among the oldest women, not simply “at early age.” The detail paragraph gives only a few incomplete claims, and “40 percent of mens” does not accurately represent the 1975/76 figures across age groups. The final sentence breaks off before reporting the maximum or making a meaningful comparison. The response is also 76 words, below the required 150, so it cannot provide the range of key features needed. Include clear comparisons between years and sexes, supported by accurate figures.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

There is a basic attempt to organise the response into an introduction, an overview and a detail paragraph, and phrases such as “Overall” and “Turning to the details” signal these stages. This gives the reader some sense of the intended structure. However, progression is limited because the detail paragraph stops mid-sentence at “Whereas, maximun propor,” leaving the comparison unfinished. The relationship between ideas is also not always clear: “However, both had at early age least driving licences” does not clearly connect to the preceding overview. Develop separate, complete comparisons—for example, one paragraph on changes over time and another on differences by age and sex—and use linking words only where their relationship is clear.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

The response uses some relevant chart vocabulary, including “percentage,” “proportion,” “driving licences,” and “age and sex,” so the topic is generally recognisable. However, the range is narrow, and several inaccurate or misspelled choices make parts difficult to interpret, such as “obseved,” “drecreased,” “precent,” and “maximun.” Phrases like “a 40 percent of mens” and “had at early age least driving licences” are not natural ways to describe chart data. Aim for precise expressions such as “the proportion of male licence holders” and “the lowest percentage was recorded among…” Check spelling and use consistent terms for the groups and figures. More varied comparison language would also help you report the data clearly.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You attempt both simple and more complex sentence forms, including “Overall, it can be observed that…” and a contrast introduced by “However.” The opening sentence is understandable, but grammatical control is inconsistent. For example, “the highest proportion of male” lacks a plural noun, while “females had age of 30 to 49 years” has an incomplete grammatical pattern. In “there were a 40 percent,” the article and sentence construction are incorrect. The final clause is unfinished, so it cannot communicate a complete comparison. Use complete sentences with a clear subject and verb, and check articles, plurals and agreement. For instance, write “The highest proportion of men held licences in the 30–39 age group” rather than using “proportion of male.”

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