Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · IELTS Summit Mastery · 2026-11-12

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graphs below show the percentage of people holding full driving licences in Great Britain by age and sex.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Full car driving licence holders: by sex and age

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The bar chart illustrates the percentage of people having driving license by their age and gender in Great Britain in the years 1975/76 and 2006.

Overall, in both the years the percentage of males holding driving license were more than females in case of all age groups in both the years. While, more females of all ages of females were interested imore in driving in the recent years than the earlier days, the percentage of men increased a bit in the corresponding years.

The maximum number of males arholding a driving license were in the age of

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 3.5

You identify the chart’s subject and make a relevant broad comparison: men had higher licence-holding percentages than women across the age groups, while women’s figures were generally higher in 2006 than in 1975/76. However, the response is only a partial summary. It gives no usable numerical comparisons or account of the main age patterns, and the final sentence, “The maximum number of males … were in the age of”, is unfinished. The claim that men’s percentage “increased a bit” is also too general: changes varied considerably by age, and the figure for men aged 21–29 fell. The response is 53 words below the required minimum, which leaves the key features substantially undeveloped. Add a complete overview and selected, accurate comparisons.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

There is a basic attempt to organise the response: an introductory sentence is followed by an overview beginning “Overall”. This gives the reader a starting point, but the progression stops before any detailed description is provided. The final line is incomplete, so it does not form a coherent paragraph or complete an idea. Linking is also awkward in “While, more females …”, where the contrast marker is not integrated into a complete sentence, and the repeated wording in “all ages of females” makes the overview difficult to follow. To improve, use a clear sequence—introduction, overview, then one or two paragraphs comparing age groups—and connect complete ideas with simple, accurate transitions.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use relevant topic vocabulary such as “percentage”, “age”, “gender” and “holding a driving license”, so the subject is generally recognisable. However, the range is limited and some expressions are unnatural or imprecise, including “people having driving license”, “interested … in driving” and “in the earlier days”. The repeated use of “percentage” and “driving license” also restricts variety. There are visible word-form and spelling slips, such as “imore” and “arholding”, which interrupt reading. Choose neutral chart language rather than describing people’s interest: for example, say that the proportion of licence holders rose or fell. More precise terms such as “licence holders”, “proportion” and “age group” would make the report clearer and more appropriate.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

The response includes some longer sentence attempts, particularly the overview sentence beginning “While”, but control is uneven and the range remains limited. There are agreement problems in “the percentage … were more than females” and “The maximum number … were”, as well as an incomplete final sentence that prevents the intended comparison from being understood. The construction “While, more females …” is not a complete, well-formed contrast, and the phrase “in both the years” is awkwardly formed. These issues make parts of the response difficult to interpret, although the opening sentence is understandable. Aim for complete sentences with a clear subject and verb, check singular agreement with “percentage”, and use straightforward comparative structures before attempting longer clauses.

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