Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · IELTS Summit Mastery · 2026-07-24
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graphs below show the percentage of people holding full driving licences in Great Britain by age and sex.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Full car driving licence holders: by sex and age
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The bar graph below compare the proportion of men and women having full driving licences in Great Britain by there age and sex.
Overall, there are total seven ages from 17 to 70 who have car driving license , moreover the age group of men from 60-69 and 50-59 has most percentage of license while the men and women of age 17-20 has the least percentage of license holding. Also it compares the age group from 1975 and 2006.
Firstly, the inhabitants who are from 70 and above in men the license holders drastically increased and same to women from 5 to 25. Individual from 60-69 the has the large increase as compare to men 15 to 65 percentage in 2006 . People from 50-59 has the highest craze of having license for men it has increased from 75 to 90 percent and in women it increased by thrice 22 to 75 percentage.
Secondly, furthermore the adults ageing from 30-39 in men it was same but in women it has increased from 42 to 62 . In addition the youngsters in men the 1975 has the most amount of driving license in women the 2006 has the most. Moreover the teenagers has the least experience so they have least amount of driving license.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response attempts to address the task but fails to accurately interpret the provided data. The student confuses the years (1975 and 2006) and misinterprets the age categories, leading to factual inaccuracies. While the response identifies some trends, the lack of clarity regarding the data points makes it difficult to follow. The overview is confusing, as it mentions 'seven ages' and refers to data not clearly supported by the graph. To improve, you must focus on accurately reporting the figures and trends shown in the visual, ensuring that your summary reflects the actual data provided rather than making general, unsupported statements.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The response is organised into paragraphs, but the logical progression is weak. The use of cohesive devices like 'Firstly', 'Secondly', and 'Furthermore' is mechanical and often used incorrectly, as the content following these markers does not always logically follow the previous point. Referencing is frequently unclear, making it difficult for the reader to understand which age group or gender is being discussed. The transition between ideas is often abrupt, and the lack of clear, accurate data reporting hinders the overall flow of the essay.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
The vocabulary is limited and repetitive. There are several instances of word-choice errors, such as 'highest craze' and 'inhabitants who are from 70 and above', which are not appropriate for a formal report. The student struggles to use precise terminology to describe trends (e.g., 'drastically increased' is used where the data might show a different trend). While the meaning is generally conveyed, the lack of variety and the misuse of certain terms prevent the response from reaching a higher band. Focusing on academic collocations for describing data would be beneficial.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
The response contains frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede communication. There are issues with subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'the bar graph below compare'), incorrect preposition usage, and awkward sentence structures. While there is an attempt to use complex sentences, they are often faulty or poorly constructed. Punctuation is also inconsistent, particularly with the placement of commas and the handling of numerical data. To improve, focus on basic sentence construction and ensure that subjects and verbs agree, as well as proofreading for common errors in tense and word order.
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