Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · IELTS Summit Mastery · 2026-07-25

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graphs below show the percentage of people holding full driving licences in Great Britain by age and sex.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Full car driving licence holders: by sex and age

Student answer (Band 6.0)

As we look at the graph we can see that it’s about the masses that has full car driving license according to their age and sex in Great Britain.

Overall, it can be seen that Great Britain has a number of masses that has their full car driver’s license from the minimum age of 17 years to 70 and over 70 years and it’s between mens and women from1975/75 to 2007 time period for both the sex group.

The highest no of license in men is 50-59 aged masses and for women is 40-49 in 2006.Whereas the highest in 1975/76 is 30-39 age group for both men and women. The highest %for 2006 is 90% and for women is 80%.

On the other hand the lowest no of license holders are of 2006 for men are 17-20 years as well as for women with 70 or above hold approximately same holders. The lower percentage for men of licensee holder is 35%

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

The response addresses the task requirements by identifying main features and making comparisons. However, the analysis is somewhat superficial and lacks precision in reporting data. For instance, the reference to '1975/75' is confusing, and the description of the trends is fragmented. While you have selected key data points, the overall summary lacks a clear, cohesive overview of the trends over time. To improve, ensure you clearly distinguish between the two years (1975/76 and 2006) and provide more accurate comparisons between the age groups and genders rather than listing isolated figures.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The essay is organised into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. However, the flow between sentences is often mechanical and lacks sophisticated cohesive devices. Phrases like 'On the other hand' are used, but the logical progression within paragraphs is weak. Some sentences feel disconnected, and the referencing (e.g., 'the masses') is repetitive and unnatural in an academic context. Improving the use of linking words and ensuring that each paragraph has a clear thematic focus would significantly enhance the coherence of your writing.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

The vocabulary is limited and repetitive. The use of the word 'masses' is inappropriate for this context; 'proportion of the population' or 'percentage of individuals' would be much more accurate. There are also issues with word choice, such as 'licensee holder' and 'sex group', which sound unnatural. While the vocabulary is sufficient to convey the basic meaning, it lacks the precision and range required for a higher band score. You should focus on using more academic terminology related to data description, such as 'fluctuated', 'peaked', or 'remained stable'.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

The response contains frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede clarity. There are issues with subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'the masses that has'), incorrect preposition usage, and awkward phrasing ('it’s between mens and women'). The sentence structures are relatively simple, and there is a lack of complex sentence forms. Punctuation is also inconsistent, particularly with spacing and the use of slashes. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction, ensuring subject-verb agreement, and proofreading for minor slips in articles and pluralisation.

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