Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.0 · IELTS Summit Mastery · 2026-08-04
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graphs below show the percentage of people holding full driving licences in Great Britain by age and sex.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Full car driving licence holders: by sex and age
Student answer (Band 4.0)
The graph illustrates that percentage of people holding full driving Licences in great Britain by age and sex.
overview, I explain two various types of graph which one side is men and women age in different years the one line are peak and other is down.
As it is represent that male are female age difference about the car driving licence holders by age in 1975 the male percentage is 38%as compared the women percent is 20%. Furthermore in 1976 the men rate is at the age of 21-29 is 78% on other side is women rate in the age of 21-29 is 40%. In the age of 50- 59 the both sex are the percentage is women 20% and men 60%. Therefore the age of 60-69 is mature age of both so the rate is 18%and men rate is 69%. So the age of 70above the percentage rate is women is 10% and men 30%.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0
The response attempts to address the task but fails to provide a clear summary of the main features. The overview is confusing and does not accurately reflect the trends shown in the graphs. Furthermore, the data provided is often inaccurate or poorly presented, such as referencing specific years (1975, 1976) which are not clearly supported by the provided visual data. The response lacks a logical selection of key features, focusing instead on a disjointed list of figures that do not effectively compare the trends between men and women. To improve, focus on identifying the overall trend (e.g., the general increase in license holders) and highlighting the most significant differences between the age groups.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0
The essay lacks a clear structure. The introduction is poorly formed, and the body paragraphs are not logically organized. There is a lack of cohesive devices to link ideas, making the text feel like a series of disconnected sentences rather than a coherent report. The use of transition words is minimal and often misused, such as 'overview, I explain' or 'on other side is'. Paragraphing is absent, which hinders the flow of information. To improve, use clear paragraph breaks to separate the introduction, overview, and specific data points, and employ a wider range of linking words to connect your observations.
Lexical Resource — Band 4.0
The vocabulary is very limited and repetitive. There are frequent errors in word choice and collocation, such as 'mature age of both' and 'the one line are peak and other is down'. The student relies on basic terminology and struggles to express the data accurately. There are also issues with capitalization and spelling (e.g., 'Licences', 'great Britain'). To reach a higher band, you need to use a wider range of vocabulary related to describing trends, such as 'fluctuate', 'peak', 'decline', and 'proportion', and ensure that these terms are used in the correct context.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0
The response contains frequent grammatical errors that often impede communication. Sentence structures are simple and often incomplete or poorly constructed, such as 'the both sex are the percentage is women 20% and men 60%'. There are consistent issues with subject-verb agreement, article usage, and prepositional phrases. The lack of punctuation and correct sentence boundaries makes the text difficult to follow. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction, ensuring every sentence has a clear subject and verb, and practicing the correct use of articles and prepositions when describing statistical data.
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