Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · IELTS Summit Mastery · 2026-08-05

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graphs below show the percentage of people holding full driving licences in Great Britain by age and sex.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Full car driving licence holders: by sex and age

Student answer (Band 4.0)

The given graph shows the full car driving license holders: by sex and age.

Men at the age of 70 or above hold 75% driving license, on the other hand women at the age of 70 or above hold only 30% full driving license.

Now we will talk about the men at the age of 60-69 at this age they hold about 85% of full driving license; Women hold only 65% license at this age.

At 50-59 age men hold 90% of license while women hold 95% of car driving license.

Men at the age of 40-49 have their full car driving license about 85% on the other hand women at that age hold 80% licenses.

At 30-39 age 84% men have their license; at that age 80% women have their license.

At 21-29 age 70% men have their license; at this age 63% women have their car license.

Finally at 17-20 men ha

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0

The response fails to provide an overview of the main trends, which is a critical requirement for Task 1. Instead, it presents a list of data points for each age group, which is repetitive and lacks synthesis. The information is not grouped logically, and the response ends abruptly mid-sentence, meaning the data for the 17-20 age group is missing entirely. To improve, you should group the data by trends (e.g., age groups where men are higher vs. where women are higher) and provide a clear summary of the overall patterns observed in the graph.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0

The response lacks paragraphing and logical progression. Each sentence is essentially a standalone statement of data, which makes the text feel like a list rather than a cohesive report. There is a lack of cohesive devices to link ideas; the text relies on repetitive sentence structures like 'At [age] age [percentage] men have their license'. The abrupt ending further disrupts the flow of the response. To improve, use linking words such as 'whereas', 'in contrast', or 'similarly' to connect your observations and organize your points into clear paragraphs.

Lexical Resource — Band 4.0

The vocabulary is very limited and repetitive. You use the phrase 'full car driving license' or 'license' in almost every sentence, which shows a lack of lexical variety. There is no attempt to use synonyms or more sophisticated vocabulary to describe the data (e.g., 'proportion', 'percentage', 'figures', 'majority'). The phrasing is often unnatural, such as 'men at the age of 70 or above hold 75% driving license', which is grammatically awkward. Expanding your vocabulary to include terms related to statistics and trends is essential for a higher score.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0

The grammatical range is very limited, consisting almost entirely of simple sentences. There are frequent errors in article usage (e.g., 'at 50-59 age'), preposition usage, and sentence structure. The phrasing 'men at the age of 70 or above hold 75% driving license' is missing necessary articles and prepositions. Additionally, the response is incomplete, which prevents the demonstration of a wider range of structures. To improve, focus on using a mix of complex sentence structures and ensure you are using articles and prepositions correctly when discussing statistics.

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